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12-17 lines
due no later than 72 hours
topic is the holocaust

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-- Fri Mar 18, 2011 2:38 am --

I didn't realise u held the title bro

I Dont Have The Title Man Im Battling For It Now


And Do You Mind Changin Topic I Already Did That Against SacredVerse

Not at all man, u pick bro, you'll kill me but fuck it it's all experience

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-- Fri Mar 18, 2011 4:58 am --

How about it's judgement day and we confessing our Sinz to God, down with that?
Extend to 20-25 lines?

-- Fri Mar 18, 2011 4:59 am --

72 hours

Holy Shit Man Thats A Nice Topic Im Down With That And We Dont Know Who Gunna Win Yet Man Anyways GoodLuck

Cool man, goodluck too cuz, lookin forward to it, c u on the battlefeild bro

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-- Fri Mar 18, 2011 7:49 am --

Yo man the world just stopped TURNING, last thing I saw was four horsemen and felt hardcore BURNING, now I gotta confess my sins to GOD cos I've killed men like an online game of C.O.D, staring into a face with White beard and all seeing EYES, gotta justify all the bad choices I made in my LIFE, forgive me lord, I banged with THUGS, took advantage of my mum and sold DRUGS, sold that cro to kids in UNIFORM, shoulda been good but been bad since the day I was BORN, I FUCKED and CHUCKED GIRLS, now I'm shaking at the end of the WORLD, lord please show mercy upon my SOUL, I worked my ass off and never claimed DOLE, in fact fuck u god, I'll gladly descend into the HOLE, cos wen it comes to bein bad, I do it so WELL, I belong in HELL, fuck ur HALO and WINGS, I choose to spend eternity puffin on DRO and doin evil THINGS, I choose to live with the satanic KINGS//

I Ascend Up To The Pearly Gates To Await My Fate
My Path Is Blocked By ST Peter Who Checks My Name
I Mutter "Orfadox" He Looks Up Then Down Again
"The Lord Himself Would Like A Word,Take A Seat And Wait"
I Sit Down Just Itching To Step Forth Into Paradice
But My Mind Flashes Back To Stupid Shit On Drunken Nights
Half Of It Seems Innocuous Stupid Jokes And Silly Fights
So Why God Would Want To Speak To Me I Cant Figure Out Try As I Might
Yeah I Smoked I Drank I Even Took Drugs But I Never Killed Anyone
Still Trying To Figure It Out When I Notice ST Peter Is Gone
Hes Been Replaced By A Man I Dont Even Recognise
"I Am The Lord Almighty The Father Of Jesus Christ"
I Stare Blankly As He Opens His Mouth To Speak
"Behind These Gates Are Everything You Could Ever Dream"
"But To Enter I Want You To Confess,You Need To Repent Your Sins"
My Mind Goes Blank Then I Suddenly Start Telling Him Everything
He Looks Down At Me With Pity I Still Dont Know Why
"It Seems Like You Lived A Full And Healthy Life"
So Why Does He Still Look Upset With Me I Have No Clue
"You Never Beleived This Existed Otherwise Your Soul Would Of Remained True"

I have to give this to Orfadox..didn't really see alot of multies and I missed Orf's flow in some spots but his concept on the subject was tighter and more on point..the flow was fairly even....not much in metaphores and punch lines were faairly even...neilz fell off for me in the end...I felt it lost concept...good shit from both of ya'll though...win=orfadox.

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Orf takes this with a more complex verse and concept of topic. 32neilz, the way you came at this topic was very simple and basic IMO. flow was meh for both, I lost it a couple times on both verses. Orf, props on keeping me anticipating the ending, I did not expect that. neilz, you got potential homie, keep at it...

Vote - Orf

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Safe for votin omnie

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