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Wassup, I'm new here.

My name is Nah, an emcee from Saigon Vietnam. I been rapping for 5 years, in both English and Vietnamese. I got 2 self-released Vietnamese albums and I'm planning to make a LP that is fully recorded in English.

I've been looking for a site to elevate my lyrics, and this place looks pretty dope. Hope I can get some constructive criticism

Here is my latest work:

Nah is like (Produced by Emancipator)
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oBUs3dzR9cY[/video]
Life is like a broken circle
Different day same shit ain't nothing gonna change
You wake up you go to sleep you wake up you go to sleep
Until one day you sleep and never gonna wake up again
To live and die with a heart full of pain
In the end nobody give a fuck it's all a part of the plan ha
Nah is like the missing link in the circle
Life becomes heaven when I'm being verbally purple
My Downfall and my Awakening were for the Vietnamese
Now I'm going international
Representin' Viet pride as being intellectually rational

Nah is all about that deep shit
Like the street with morals you know it's strictly business
The underground concerts, the sold out CDs
Saigon Vietnam I hold down my city
Nah is like, half living and half dead
I tell you all the truth like a man in his last breath
That you are just another slave of the system
No matter what party you in, there is no freedom
Being cool is your state of mind
Wear chains on your neck like a slave of rhyme
Try to shine, but it was all a waste of time
I'm so fast to get cash, it's the pace of mine
While you sittin there and puff slow
It's the game of money that got everybody struggle
End of the story, I solve the puzzle
Check mate, crack the safe so respect the hustle

Hip hop might not be dead, it's still in Saigon, right here
And you know they say I'm like the Viet version of Nas

Hold up, I ain't tryin to jack his name though
The opposite of yes a different way of sayin no
Nah is like the answer to gold diggers
Phony bitches, wankstas and bold wiggas
The sign on the street: "nah passing through"
So don't cross me, that's what they be asking you
I'm like the old scriptures, written to mold leaders
The legendary Kong Ming that go to war witcha
Mad at me? Go head and hate me now
My name is "Son"/sun, so you can never take me down
See you a fan of my last song, but now you a hater
Like the zombie I'm coming straight outta the graveyard
Half living half dead I ain't being sarcastic
If hip hop is dead then I'ma live in the casket
The manifestation of the realest and illest
Wear a vest, if you really listening to this music

For ya'll that don't know
English is not my first language
So let me kick some of my Vietnamese rap for ya'll

Bay h thi Nah la gi
Nah la gio, Nah la may, Nah tu do, di ve day
Rap tieng anh rap tieng viet, tao deu co, cho may bay
Van de la dang cap, tao noi ro cho may hay
Tuc nuoc vo bo, tao se flow nhu la nuoc chay
Tham sau vao dat nuoi song co hoa va cay
Mai sat roi nen kim, tao se flow nhu la lua chay
Kim moc thuy hoa tho tu lai ve tai day

Much respect to Emancipator
Peace

-- Thu Mar 31, 2011 2:16 am --

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shit was dope, beat fit the lyrics perfectly

a lot of deep shit in there

dudes don't understand that you can say some profound shit without it being complicated

'being cool is your state of mind/ wearing chains like your a slave to rhyme'

i'm not a fan of when dudes rap in foreign languages though

keep at it man

thanks. it's vietnamese accent

i really like this...nice flow and rhyme scheme...solid vocab...the accent and annunciation might throw some off i thought it was pretty dope

Pretty dope, its great to see emcees all the way from vietnam! Keep at it my dude.

thanks

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Wow, this is really done well. You had some very nicely done lines in this piece, most notably for me were these...

Hold up, I ain't tryin to jack his name though
The opposite of yes a different way of sayin no
Nah is like the answer to gold diggers
Phony bitches, wankstas and bold wiggas

The beat fits the track, the flow is on point for the most part, meaning some lines seemed you were trying to fit a little too much in, but nothing was so bad that it took away from the verse. I like how you came at it with both launguages too, giving it something different for people that dont know anything about it. The rapping of that sounds SO different, yet sounds very musical too. I think the one thing you can work on to make your stuff alot better is the delivery at the end of your bars, just making it stand out a little more when you hit the end of certain bars or want to bring out the feeling in certain words. This was a great drop tho fam. Keep it coming. One love.

The Production you got from Emancipator definitely fits the overall mood and concept for which you were addressing. I can see you struggle a little with your accent on certain words, but if English isn't your first language then ofcourse that's going to be an obstacle that you'll run into everytime you flow.

You have some solid lines and good emotion, but the overall presentation is what'll need work longterm down the road. I like hearing artists from other parts of the map flex their primary language on a track, even if I don't understand it...it still sounds dope to me. Keep grinding and doing what you do man. I rate this song 6.5/10

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Thanks I appreciate honest and constructive feedbacks, they help me to elevate. Keep them coming.

haha that beat sounds saigon..i like it it's real moody..

I actually thought ya flo and shit was pretty on .. pronounciation does take away fom the seriousness of the track tho..imo....prob work on that first and def keep doin what you doing man ..