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-At fourteen , he just needed more wealth and dreams
-With no means , of defeating low self esteem
-A soft teen , only treated unhealthy themes
-Like morphine , he beleived it releived and cleaned
-But he seen a mistake as he was moving along
-This routine was a fake , he was doing was wrong
-So to keep up his rising and prove he was strong
-He put the beat on like Tyson , when doing his song
-Upstream went his funds , as he started to flow
-A supreme menace once he departed below
-He was steady and slow , but was ready to grow
-Didnt worry about the bread , he had plenty of doe
-He would never retire , or even abandon
-Cause like Nick and Mariah he would Carey them Cannons
-The song he was planning , was a work of art
-He would aim for your heart with his bows and arcs
-As he chose his darts , that would form the sparks
-With the music that he fired , he'd explode the charts
-This the story of a man , that was slow to start
-But never left , took his stance like Rosa Parks


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1) lyrical samurai
2) the music

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Dope, to sum it up, everythin' perfect here, 8 / 10 imo

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its kewl ,round of applause

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Thanks for the feedback

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the cannon line was my fav. good post overall.

good flow bro. last 2 lines were my fav. mayb a few more metaphors but on a scale i say 7.5/10. good rhymes bro.

Thanks , ill try to get that 10/10 next time lol

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Nice drop..shit flowed perfect on dmx-aint no sunshine

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i really liked this, nice multi's and flow