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-- Wed Apr 13, 2011 5:37 pm --

Yo seventhrity/
Should change his name to im dirty/

Cause hes used like a broken condom/
He gonna wished his mom wore a condom/

Im gonna put 30 shots in this bitch/
Hes Wishin only 7 of them hit/

Imma show him whos the bronx bombers/
Hes gonna choke like Palmer/

Im sick and tired of this wannabee/
Cause he couldnt get enough feed on his first drop to touch my knees.

Expos-one of his drops is called sick n tired.
Carson palmer fumbles the ball against steelers
Hes from new york and his fav artist is nas and nas made a song U WANNA BE ME.

Only thing you collect be the lyrical bullets I'm firing in ya Face Son,
Ya Fake Son, call me "government" the way I'm taking "money out of Circulation"

"laundering" him after i "press" him quick like i "iron-did"(ironed it)
when i say that i "may-tag"(maytag) money I'm not shit talking, i just "apply-and-spit"(appliances)

your rhymes make me vomit like i-said(acid) reflex disease in my Tummy See
i "spark" him and "endo"(end hoe) , i "hang" this doe up in my back yard, call it the "Money Tree"

Except now its time for me to "Collect money" like the "federal Agency"
Expect When i Inspect his counter-fed(counterfeit) Accounts Amounts, its Bound to read Vacant-Sea(vacancy)

Homey your Phony ass already "Owe-Me" your life and the "balance" is Past Due,
im "landing punches" so Loud-And powerful your "allow-ants"(allowance) gets Passed Through

Looking for some votes

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yo man you getting ate here money

Cat sweep in everything for seven 3rty


this was kinda of a lop sided battle in my perspective..


Money you need to fix your structure be more complex, cause you gonna get ate everytime with rhymes like that, maybe not on the streets but text wise its all about content

vote goes to SEVEN

ok..money.you are trying to make your lines longer which is good but you need more content in your lines..and your vocab and disses need to be more complex
7:30..you took every category so I'm not breaking down..you had good flow and decent punches..ok wordplay..ect. ect....one sided battle here...side note 7:30...just cause you change how something is spelled doesn't make it wordplay unless it ties in with the bar..but decent verse overall

MVGT: 7:30

0-2 uppin for some votes

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7 30 brought some nice wordplay into the match, which helped his punchlines and disses stand out more. The appliances was a stretch though fam. Money, you're getting better with every verse, and I dont want you to get discouraged at all. Im glad you keep working at it and you do keep improving with every verse. Just keep at it. 7 30, the only thing I see more faulty than anything with your verses is it seems like your delivery is off sometimes, but you have really good concepts that you bring to the table.

Over-all, this vote is going to 7 30. Thread closed and records updated.

7 30 wins KO.