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Short Verse

Posted: Sat May 21, 2011 9:37 am
by MobiusX1984
a teen infatuated with cream, never had dreams
always hung out with the wrong crowd in the streets
never believed an education would lead
a prosperous life through a college degree
captivated by glamorous, hollywood fame
couldn't refrain from watchin television all day
his mindset wasn't hard to explain
a school dropout, unable to maintain good grades
reality never sunk in but in back of his mind
constant thoughts of livin a life of crime
standin on streets corners from 9 to 5
an ambition and drive just to sell a dime
some call it survive, only to find more struggle
poisoning lives is what we doin to each other
never get trapped inside the games of a hustler

Re: Short Verse

Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 9:37 am
by Demo+
Damn.. Bro.. I Think This was Pretty Cool.. Tha Flow Was Good.. It Had Ah' Audio Type Of Feel.. Good Read.. I Was Able To Feel It More Kuz Im Ah' Hustler.

Hopefully I'll See More Of You

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Re: Short Verse

Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 2:25 pm
by M33Kish
Definitely should be an audio piece, short sweet and to the point. Not anything special about it imo but then again, it shows storytelling potential, keep it up.

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Re: Short Verse

Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 5:28 pm
by MobiusX1984
what would be a good beat for this?

Re: Short Verse

Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 5:40 pm
by M33Kish
racks on racks lol