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dis isnt really my style of rap... but yno just check it out

no child support I aint kiddin
shells droppin extended mag banana clippin
body parts in da kitchen... n bodies erodin
corpes gettin ate by rodents shotties explodin
ur brain slows as ur arteries chokin
let off 5 shots top then Im reloadin
ghettofied hot spot... part of me frozen
unidentified dropped cops hot as me u gotta B jokin
fuck it I always win even wen da lottery's closin
da flow's honestly golden man Im modestly chosin
yall niggas dont even have 2 balls like da letter i
I dont even lift my wings n my feathers fly
(fellas die after turnin petrified set aside da several knives dat get inside my girlfriend I just rape her then let her die)
no joke... u say u gon fuck me up u a homo
I skeep on Rosie ODonald while playin da oboe
Im da best cummin out of VA I declare it
N wen I turn grizzly yall cant bear it
dis rap shud B named Jordan cuz dey about 2 air it

tell me wat u think n gimme sum feedback plz

This some type of horrorcore verse? Its ok for what it is. You might wanna drop somethun that IS your style of writing so ppl kno what ur about and what qualities you hold. Other than that, welcome

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I agree with loon but it was a decent first drop a 6/10. And welcome to illest

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Pretty cool basic flow goin on. Drop more, know more.

Fuck all that, I like this shit, slap an old tupac sample with this and you got yourself hellraiser pt. 2. I'm diggin this shit imagery was off the chain. I felt the end of it though you lost the original concept and just added metas so people would feel it more but imo this has the potential to be a great story piece.

DROP MORE!!!

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