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i drop this task-with-multis like classic-oldies, watch ya casket-closely cuz im so fast-its-ghostly,
i'll trash-this-slowly n start grippin-sockets n rippin-optics, reversin scripts-n-objects like im flippin-topics, no kid-can-stop-this.. i show more balls than a dick-when-topless, i'm sick-n-plot-twists so when i'm shittin-rockets i crap-disease, n when i spit i make rap-dicease, yet holy like pastor-preist i'll cast-the-beast with destruction from my masterpiece, i see-things-that-might-provoke-in-matches, three-kings-the-type-to-choke-in-practice, an antiprophet so i crack visions like broken-glasses, ARMED with NICOTINE but u'll never see SMOKE~in-PATCHES

hidden locks like cloakened-latches, verbal tilts from an outspoken-axis, soaked-in-gasses, now the joke-went-passed-diss, kill me and i'll erupt-the-surface with a corrupted-purpose of nervous verses so discursive it disperses curses, worst-is it searches reimburseless persons from the first-list of my urges to burst-with rehearsed-gifts of my birth-spit,...its worth-it, every perv-gets its deserved-hits to preserve-shit before its reserved-with curved-bits of disturbed-kids, cannibalistic with a hand-n-biscuit no chance-to-resist-it in the stance-to-assistance as i glance-thru-existance of my fans-who-insist-this....ok im bored now lol


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kill me and i'll erupt-the-surface with a corrupted-purpose of nervous verses so discursive it disperses curses, worst-is it searches reimburseless persons from the first-list of my urges to burst-with rehearsed-gifts of my birth-spit,...its worth-it, every perv-gets its deserved-hits to preserve-shit before its reserved-with curved-bits of disturbed-kids,

That part was fun to read.

There wasn't to many lines that stuck out. Though the last line in the first verse was some creative wordplay. It had solid flow through out the whole thing. A few things seemed to be worded awkward. Overall it was good for a little rap though.

second verse was for the hell of it.. i dont feel like posting a link but i left feedback in ghost's last topic, worded awkwardly.. probably the second verse cuz i was just rhyming for the hell of it.. but it goes with the title there's not much else to it

yo man! that first verse was ill as hell man, nice read, very nice read if i may say so myself, and dont listen to PLeX...lol, it wasnt a battle verse he was jus rhymin multies, so to me everyline stuck out man, second verse was off the chains as well. Should spit this on audio, its straight fire homie

yea it would sound better on audio lol thanks for the feedback

Everyline was good. The didn't stick up from one another is what I was saying.

flowed nice as hell, itd make a real interesting audio verse
nice drop, fun to read lol

tank ya tank ya, i need a recording program ... so if n e of u have one can u send me it

yea i got lots lol, ask me next time your on msn

LoL Fa Sheezy So You'd Be Spittin That Audio Pretty Fast Huh? That Would Be Dope as Hell, Nice Read Tho Peace

shit, that blew my mind...haven't seen lyrics with that quality for a while

i'm joining in on the audio recordin homez, that would be off the hook if you're able to do it with the right tempo, that'll create an ill flow!

the speed isn't a problem.. im not twista or bizzy bone tho lol..

chea..haha, they're just fuckin amazing. don't fuckin understand how it's possible to rap that goddamn fast!

anyways lookin forward to hearin the audio!