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-- Tue Jun 21, 2011 8:57 am --

check..where you at? clock's tickin...

check.

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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/pest-2em-vt22862.html


Simple but effective--

2,you gotta one way ticket to “6-feet below”, hope you gotta good hold on the “trinity”,
Savin my best rhymes of infamy, never “investin” in “funerals” cuz it’s a “dyin” industry//
(Trinity – Father/Son/Holy Ghost)

Takin Deuce to the “Dentist” so you can “know the drill”,
Mutha-fucka callin out “pills?”, Renamin this kid William, cuz “I’m Firing At Will”//
(Called out EcKsTaSy)

Battle text with EcK?, E-M makin himself look like an ass kid,
do the simple math kid, and “Stay Off the Grass” kid//

Break ya “neck”, rip out the “chords” and leave you “voiceless”,
Take some advice, you’re writin with a “broken pencil”, its “pointless”//

I'm wreakin havoc on this faggit til him brain shutdown
You got 1/ 10 in delivery probably your suck, clown

Bitch I put another T between the TA and SY of ya name
Meanin dis nigga ECK`S TASTY for more cums than a lame

This pussy must have put his brain in the pocket and sit on it
I`ll open my fuckin ass like aircraft, droppin rocket and i`ll shit on him

Don't even try do audio, ur voice might crack, n sound like some walkie talkie shit
Besides your suck already, but your famous in droppin wacky wacky shit,

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-- Sat Jun 25, 2011 2:36 am --

I'm wreakin havoc on this faggit til him brain shutdown
You got 1/ 10 in delivery probably your suck, clown

Bitch I put another T between the TA and SY of ya name
Meanin dis nigga ECK`S TASTY for more cums than a lame

This pussy must have put his brain in the pocket and sit on it
I`ll open my fuckin ass like aircraft, droppin rocket and i`ll shit on him
Don't even try do audio, ur voice might crack, n sound like some walkie talkie shit.
Besides your suck already, but your famous in droppin wacky wacky shit,

HERE IS MA VOTE LINK www.illestlyrics.com/board/meika-joe-saint-vt22905.html

Punches: ecks 2em ur 2nd bar was gay
Flow: ecks 2em u need to word ur shit better
Multis: ecks easily
Personals: ecks 2em i don't think u had any
Enjoyment: ecks 2em read what i said in ur battle with splash

MVGT: EcKsTaSy
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Punches: e
Flow: e
Multis: e
Personals: e
Enjoyment: e


vote- e

dark prince.... your excluded from voting in any of ma shit.

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Eck's Verse

2,you gotta one way ticket to “6-feet below”, hope you gotta good hold on the “trinity”,
Savin my best rhymes of infamy, never “investin” in “funerals” cuz it’s a “dyin” industry//
(Trinity – Father/Son/Holy Ghost)

The wordplay here is nice, but you gotta have more of a direct punch, I think.

Takin Deuce to the “Dentist” so you can “know the drill”,
Mutha-fucka callin out “pills?”, Renamin this kid William, cuz “I’m Firing At Will”//
(Called out EcKsTaSy)

This concept could have been delivered better...

Battle text with EcK?, E-M makin himself look like an ass kid,
do the simple math kid, and “Stay Off the Grass” kid//

You rhymed kid with everything, which takes away from this some, and what does staying off the grass have to do with anything? You have to incorporate the wordplay in order for it to become wordplay bro.

Break ya “neck”, rip out the “chords” and leave you “voiceless”,
Take some advice, you’re writin with a “broken pencil”, its “pointless”//

I see the wordplay through the bar, but its better if you can incorporate wordplay with your first line AND the second line. The concept for the punchline is good, but could have been delivered better.


2 EM's Verse

I'm wreakin havoc on this faggit til him brain shutdown
You got 1/ 10 in delivery probably your suck, clown

After saying he could have delivered his lines better, this was funny in my opinion, but that doesnt make it hard hitting, either.

Bitch I put another T between the TA and SY of ya name
Meanin dis nigga ECK`S TASTY for more cums than a lame

No.

This pussy must have put his brain in the pocket and sit on it
I`ll open my fuckin ass like aircraft, droppin rocket and i`ll shit on him

Open your ass?!? That's the most homo thing I have read on here in awhile man.

Don't even try do audio, ur voice might crack, n sound like some walkie talkie shit
Besides your suck already, but your famous in droppin wacky wacky shit,

No.



My vote goes to Eckstacy for more creative concepts, mixing in more wordplay, and at least delivering somewhat on his punchlines. 2 EM, you might want to find out what a punchline is, a metaphor is, and how to incorporate some wordplay into your verse.

Ok punches :Eck multies:eck flow:eck pesonals:eck enjoyment:eck cats weep man,..2 em work on flow alil bro,couldnt follow the flow ...the last bar barely rhymed...anyway mvgt eck

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2,you gotta one way ticket to “6-feet below”, hope you gotta good hold on the “trinity”,
Savin my best rhymes of infamy, never “investin” in “funerals” cuz it’s a “dyin” industry//

Flow/multies was decent This was pretty good wordplay, but last line didnt seem effective because you werent delivering any kind of punchline towards 2-EM

Takin Deuce to the “Dentist” so you can “know the drill”,
Mutha-fucka callin out “pills?”, Renamin this kid William, cuz “I’m Firing At Will”//

Again Pretty good wordplay/metas but you could of set this up to Hit ALOT harder personal and a punchline aswell


Battle text with EcK?, E-M makin himself look like an ass kid,
do the simple math kid, and “Stay Off the Grass” kid//

This line had very very little in it, only a little wordplay in it and a decent flow but this was just filler more than anything

Break ya “neck”, rip out the “chords” and leave you “voiceless”,
Take some advice, you’re writin with a “broken pencil”, its “pointless”//

Again, good wordplay and metas, decent flow...Punchline didnt hit very hard

Overall-I think your verse was decent, and if you work on making your punchlines and personals hit alot harder towards your opponent it will make your verses ten times more effective






I'm wreakin havoc on this faggit til him brain shutdown
You got 1/ 10 in delivery probably your suck, clown


Flow was good, Multies were alright. last line wasnt very hard-hitting but it was still somewhat of a personal and a diss none the less

Bitch I put another T between the TA and SY of ya name
Meanin dis nigga ECK`S TASTY for more cums than a lame

No multies not very good flow...wordplay good, as well a So-So personal, but need to work on rewording your punches

This pussy must have put his brain in the pocket and sit on it
I`ll open my fuckin ass like aircraft, droppin rocket and i`ll shit on him

this similie was just ridiculous, and there was bad flow and no personal or punch

Don't even try do audio, ur voice might crack, n sound like some walkie talkie shit
Besides your suck already, but your famous in droppin wacky wacky shit,

Ehhhhhh.....i guess there was a little bit of personals in there and an okay similie


Overall-I think you have alot you can improve, mainly rewording your setups for your punches to make the delivery more effective and your flow is quite off and you can definately practice on working on your multies


Flow-Eckstasy
Multies-Eckstasy
Personals-2-Em
Punches-Tie
Metas-Eckstasy

Vote=Eckstasy