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I’m mentaly disturbed cut a line threw the symetry of words.
I mean the similarity and the mimicrys upsurd.
The barsz are bizzars.I keep jarsz ofem raw.
Buy far you have yet to anyalyze or come up with a suggestion. What kind of of infection I am. I’m sick as an arm with a scar..
With the illest of the lines.
While the clock ticks. To my pen hitting the tip while reclined.
I swear you don’t want me to have a lyrical fit .
Becuase if I form mucus balls that’s spherical spit. You need a mirracle bitch.
From the toxic chemicals that will leave you. Littery lit..
I’m alittle abit on the physicotic side.
In a life chrysis in the the middle of shit.
And everytime I deliver a clip its like homicide.
Knowing that know bodys a residual or equiped. So if we should or now might kolide.
The event and out come will be a slight modified.
I don’t even no why I try.
Becuase I feel like I’m the king already its kind of like something the imortals in the skys profisised.
So I’m just gonna keep write stuff if I feel like it.
Not know if poeple don’t or if they will like it.
But I already know I’ve one , man now I’m starten to feel physcic.
And if I got something on my mind I will type it

I find it hard to write self hype stuff because it's hard to get proper content. With things like this I feel that you really have to be an outstanding lyricist for it to fully work, and I can't say that you are. You are very good. Multies were there, flow was quite good, not too much downsides. It's just hard to write something compelling with this topic without it being quite slow to get through. Some of the rhyme schemes seemed a little iffy, and there were sections of chopped up flow. Add some metaphors and punchlines in to get a drop like this really hitting home.