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yo alot of niggas be dropping g's for keys/
i put on a black mask and go on a shopping spree/
i wild out like im poping e's/
evrything i cop is free/
tell me whos stoppin me/
these crackers dont see the poverty/
only see the crimes and the robberys/
would it change the whole perspective if the whole world hit the lottery?/
fuck the goverment they just filled with conspiracy/
tell us bull shit and try to cover it up visualy/
but they cant stop me physically, or spiritualy/
so ima have to let it out lyricaly/
ill turn this whole fiction part to reality/
ima bust my gun till i die cuz im on some thug life mentality/
there will be shells in ur mouth like u was sleepin on a ocean shore/
i could spit deeper than the ocean floor/
i spit like i wanna die/
but fuck it ima gonna die/
so at the end im gonna ride/
and see whos the real niggas that will by my side/
evry day i talk to god,but he's not knowin what to tell/
how can i make it heaven/
if im living in hell/
after i go to sleep, will my soul be immortal for an eternal existance?/
or will i just fade away perished from life itself in a instance/
no one knows until the day u gotta go/
so i continue wat i do,and what i do i gotta do/
hustlin for food,on the corner smoking blunts wit my crew/
theres questions in life that cant be explained/
like why do we all suffer,why do we live in pain/
traped in my own mind and it drives me insane/
insanity reapiting itself hoping for change/
but i dont see the light evrythings the same/
kicks off the adrenalin blood pressure rushes up my vains/
i cant maintain the madness that goes off and i dont know who blame/
my life is dry'd out like the sun after the rain/
so im tryna get over quick,im taking the fast lane/...



p.s

all my niggas in a huddle spittin in the cypher, all 6 niggas spittin fire/
spittin like the flow cant be expired/
but my flow is fluidity,gave me the ability to spit hot bars with humidity/
and melt down niggas stupidity/
i stretch out my bars into beyond infiniti/
and still spit enuff to come back 3 more times n make it trinity/



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Link Please.

this was better than some of your other shit you still need to work on your bar structure, at least make them near the same length

rhyme scheme showed potential but it fell off alot and went back to basic shit

that was decent. some parts where better than others. I think lyrically it kinda feel off toward the end.

yo alot of niggas be dropping g's for keys/
i put on a black mask and go on a shopping spree/
i wild out like im poping e's/
evrything i cop is free/
tell me whos stoppin me/
these crackers dont see the poverty/
only see the crimes and the robberys/

^favorite part.

toward the end, you kind of stop usin multis. It wuld have been overall better if you kept the same type of flow and use of multis throughout the whole verse. Topic was cool, a lil played, but you did it better than most.

but yeah, good stuff. stay up and keep dropin.

good looks on the feed back, yea i kinda lost it at the end it i was just typin it off my head was tryna keep up with the flow.