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this is one verse of a song I haven't finished yet. i cant wait to hear subsits response.

you should pause for concern, theres cause for alarm,
world is on fire, constant fighting between Christianity & islam..
a difficult battle, only factions engaging,
bastardized 'religion of peace' leading to fractured relations..
use compassion restraint-cause..PC can not defeat throat cutters,
very venomous enemy attempting to murder or convert us..
this is no revelation....no new phenomena,
it started when mohammed spread with the sword, the word of allah...
christianity had a reformation, revoked their past patterns,
no more subversive actions in order to control the masses..
the islamofascists are devolving disasters,
7th century dwellers, yet wondering why they haven't past-us..
honor killings, sharia law, berkas, and aggressive jihad,
have no place on the face of the earth & are a threat to us all...
not all muslims are terrorists, but all terrorists are muslims,
an unwanted holy war, but its forth and four and we can afford no fumblin...



http://illestlyrics.com/board/viewtopic.php?t=2433

this was hot, also speakin the truth here.

Ill. I liked just about every line, and the concept was nice.

christianity had a reformation, revoked their past patterns,
no more subversive actions in order to control the masses..
the islamofascists are devolving disasters,

Very slick. 9/10. Nice flow as well.

good job bitch i hated it

thats not feed. thats dueche-bagery.

8th wrote: not all muslims are terrorists, but all terrorists are muslims,
an unwanted holy war, but its forth and four and we can afford no fumblin...

Good Shit Man. Favorite Line.
Agreed @ Demented. Speaks Truth.
Hot Shit Man

ayo you already know this is mad fire

you're right i disagree ,but put that aside it was a good piece . your rhymescheme was kinda hard but eventually i figured it out. big part of likin a verse is relatin to it , which i dont , unlike the rest .

rhyme scheme was sloppy, in some parts it worked but most parts it didn't really

topic was cool, different than the norm for most shit posted here

concept was good but it could've been worded a lil better imo

drunken jesus wrote:rhyme scheme was sloppy, in some parts it worked but most parts it didn't really

topic was cool, different than the norm for most shit posted here

concept was good but it could've been worded a lil better imo

good topic....write a whole track wit a hook about it...and u can get...best topic of the month!...lol

i allready got a hook. i just need a second verse.

and its to the fugees 'Ready or not" beat. Which is a tight beat, and i thinks its clever. Get it? ready or not, we are in a holy war.

HALALALALALA KINNNSHASSSAAA!!...lol