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Kau the Lion wrote: Too unsure to move but too frightened to stand still.
When it beats this fast my heart's quite a handful.
I speak out a landfill. It's not as hard as it seems,
Like in my dreams as I see me, I speak so free and easy.

Fucking flows flawlessly.

But the reality, to me, feels more like a nightmare,
I talk to myself as if somebody might care.
The truth is right there on the tip of my tounge.
The chance is slim to none that my confidence will fight fair.

That second line hit close to home. Also really felt the last part in this section.

And speaking of chances I know I need to take more.
This oak needs to take form but I'm still just an acorn.
My childish fears . . . of rejection are effecting
How I choose to make a move. That’s ineffective affection.

Damn, that first bar is sick man. Nicely worded. And I really like how that second bar came together. Very well done bro.

My ego is shattered by my Id in self dominance.
My heart is not a lobbyist and I wonder how obvious
It is I'm scared shitless of the opposite sex.
Witness the skittish slip the only odds that he gets.

Flow is still on point. That heart not being a lobbyist part is good stuff.

Not ready, the sweat beads my head and two palms,
Trying in futility to sound cool and calm.
But I’m too far gone and this true heart’s longing
For a chance at romance and a new start bonding.

The wording throughout this section was really cool too fam.

Would I even know what to do with it if I got it,
If I had you in my pocket or you had me in a locket.
I could draw a picture, perfect. Take my pic insert it
But make a different person, the one that isn’t worthless.

That first bar is DOPE!! The second bar is deep.

Shake down the problems that restrain me in bondage.
Make out with optics and name your accomplice
It’s a shame how I’m honest, a shame how you’re not then.
A game to admonish my favorite responses.

The flow is fucking crazy here. Multi's are mad abundant.

History is a mystery to me, the past is present.
Can’t see the future or chase that incentive.
Love is a fire, somebody’s liar.
It’s ironic you get burned when a match can end it.

The first bar here is FIRE! The second bar closes this piece out nicely.


Man, your flow was on point throughout, great use of vocab, multi's, imagery, and emotion. Some deep stuff in some spots, but doesnt get too deep for any reader to appreciate, I think. This is done really nicely man. Great work here! Hope this doesnt get slept on!

But the reality, to me, feels more like a nightmare,
I talk to myself as if somebody might care.
The truth is right there on the tip of my tounge.
The chance is slim to none that my confidence will fight fair.