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this is just some simple shit, twisted as fuck right now.


http://illestlyrics.com/board/msn-cyphe ... t2516.html



Nigga i dont need no topic/
i just spit hotter than the tropics/
its all bout puttin paper in my pockets/
so im out here n ill pick any niggas pockets/
stomp his rib cage till i pop it/
poke his eye balls out his sockets/
my hustle u cant knock it/
tell me who flips more than me nobody/
the way i chop these bricks up u would of thought i knew karate/
drinkin henny in the lobby with all types of bitchis with hot bodys/
puffing on gotti's/
with the whole squad holding shottys/
smoking blunts just trippin/
making money off of drug dealing/
ballin with the money i be flippin/
different state of mind cuz that E & J got my head spinnin/
i rather be freinds with my enemys,then be close to fake niggas/
snake niggas that cool with u cuz u got cake nigga/
herb niggas that they eyes give em up/
and u already know that they butt/
fake niggas that dont like to get in trouble much/
they see u getting jumped and hesitate to jump in like double dutch/
so much purple i need me a double ''dutch''/
nigga want beef i hold on a double clutch/
poping niggas like bubble gum/
if they confront me they in trouble son/
walk around like its humble son/
so much guns i gots to get me another one/
with a banana clip/
so ima go bananas bitch/
when im spraying shit/
play the sideline and dont say shit/
shut ur lips, if u dont wanna get bodyd on the strip/
u flashin jewls,like shit is cool/
like niggas dont act a fool and str8t be crude/
and sloughter dudes for they food/
murking niggas when they in a good mood/
spray ur crew and watcha gonna do?/
u gonna call who??/
nigga what fuck u..../
nobody love u/
ull be on my grave n ima still above you/
u scared to walk in the hood cuz niggas will mug u/
halloween is over so stop actin a thug/
just cuz my guns go praat praat dosent mean my guns blood...cuzzzz/

first off, link.

but yeah, like you said its kinda simple. for a freestyle is noth bad, but nothing really special. Also, its kinda of a played topic. you kinda varied the bars length to much so sometimes it threw off the flow. but it was decent.

fake niggas that dont like to get in trouble much/
they see u getting jumped and hesitate to jump in like double dutch/

^thats my favorite line, and its real also.

but yeah, maybe add some more multis in the lines themselves, and try to keep a bar consistancy.

stay up man and keep dropin.

good looks, lol i always make my bars long just tryna get in more detail but fuck it ill learn more..and ima put a link right now god....

its not that some are streched, its just that there isnt really consistency in the bars. you should make them midsized. cause some were too long, and some where to short. you know what i mean?

yeA i feel u

Good post, it did feel like it was taking forever to read which probably takes away from its affect but I was feelin it, good post

It wasn't too bad for a freestyle man. Keep it up.