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Two worlds collide

Posted: Wed Dec 21, 2011 12:39 pm
by vanity
you reside inside my heart, sweetheart
side by side we will never ever be apart
our worlds collide its just the start
together we are clever like Picasso’s art
strangers better admire us from a far
decipher us never! see thats so hard
we are unique, we are one of a kind
when i speak you can read my mind
my trust for you, you’ve won with time
my heart skips beats, yet urs beats along with mine
things may get hard from time to time
but everything is always fine, like Miley rhymes
life has uphill battles but its about the climb
when we meet i feel complete, its so real feels so right
when our minds combine, like gods we shine
we light the skies so bright, like fireworks in the night
we might inspire jerks to start some fights, but it's alright
they must retire first, cuz i’ll always be with you despite!

Re: Two worlds collide

Posted: Mon Dec 26, 2011 10:05 pm
by QwarterZ
This is like another one of those spoken words...got a lot of strong emotion in your lines...you might not be dropping multis but its cool..your dropping some raw feelings which makes a read 10x better...nice little drop right here once again..keep writing

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Re: Two worlds collide

Posted: Tue Dec 27, 2011 1:31 am
by vanity
thanx for ur feedback :)

Re: Two worlds collide

Posted: Tue Dec 27, 2011 2:08 am
by Defiance
yeah shit reads like poetry. but i liked it on that love tip.
good shit glad to see more female lyricists on the site

Re: Two worlds collide

Posted: Sun Jan 01, 2012 6:46 am
by 88SkyLink
This was tight man. I agree with both of them, this was more poetic. But on a whole I liked it, it wasnt too complex but not too simple. It was very emotional, seen alot of stuff like this, but it was very good indeed

Re: Two worlds collide

Posted: Sun Jan 01, 2012 6:47 am
by vanity
ty for ur feed :)

Re: Two worlds collide

Posted: Sun Jan 01, 2012 8:04 am
by TreTru
i thought i left feed on this...

i was enjoying the emotion on this..and its real poetic..
i like a few of your meta's ..nice..very refreshing to have
another femcee..not many multis but still a a good read
due to some of the imagery you brought...

good stuff Van..

Re: Two worlds collide

Posted: Sun Jan 01, 2012 10:06 am
by Haz
you reside inside my heart, sweetheart
side by side we will never ever be apart
our worlds collide its just the start
together we are clever like Picasso’s art
strangers better admire us from a far
decipher us never! see thats so hard
we are unique, we are one of a kind
when i speak you can read my mind
my trust for you, you’ve won with time
my heart skips beats, yet urs beats along with mine

This part held weight, I liked it.

the second part was good 2. This was a cool read,
I like the emotion and inner rhymes, keep it up

Re: Two worlds collide

Posted: Mon Jan 02, 2012 8:23 am
by Shooter
This was a deep piece that had a-lot of strong emotion and a-lot of strong feelings

Keep up the good work

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