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Might aswell just drop this one today too. All feed appreciated and returned.


Eversince I learned the craft every verse is a murder rap
No guilt when I'm burnin cats I'm rarely concerned with that
I've returned to disturb the peace, words immersed in heat
I'm a blacksmith, murkin peeps as I disperse my fleet
Every verse is sweet, every word strategically placed
By a mind refined by time, wine the weed and the base
The codeine and the E, my heart was taking big bunny hops
I'm 'completely nuts' like a compilation of money shots


I'm the hero who appears through the year, I'm the dude you fear
So manly I came on a bitchs face and she grew a beard
My hair cuts the blade, I piss industrial solvents
Leavin Razors more worse for wear than fuckin Scott Hall is
So suck it bitch, try rip out the roots of my anger
And you'll know what it's like to be the route of my anger
Makin anger plays but don't talk shit cause I won't listen bitch
I never fish in a sea of lies I fuckin piss in it


I know I've kept you wishin that I'm in inept positions
Now begins the fuckin expedition I accept the mission
I got lasers in my eyes so talkin shit is a no go
I stay 'on top of the game' like I'm the Xbox logo
But I ain't a textcee now fuck that shit I'm sick of it
I don't write battle verses now bitch I write death certificates
But I don't wanna kill you, you're the worst I've heard spit
So why should I 'take your life' when it isn't worth shit ?


Gettin bitches wet enough to fill and flood up the great lakes
I'm the reason your momma got fuckin rid of her Shake Weight
She was tryna say my dick could fuckin pass for a matchstick
She has a big mouth so I gave her an asshole to match it
Haha ... The whore moans cause of my hormones
I fuckin smash up pussies till they look like a war zone
Some suck at suckin dick so I cut their lips off
I'm only 'goin down on them' cause my fuckin dick's soft


Fuck a punchline bitch I spit them rocket launcher lines
And they're comin at you fast firing out my monstrous mind
So fuckin target me weak nerds I dare you to start beef
I'll shove a mic in your chest and diss you over your heartbeat
I'm 'above U' like umlauts so fuck all the weak threats
Like good kids before christmas I ain't peaked yet
Fuckin A, the board told me that I couldn't record a tape
Cause to them any verse I make is aurally a form of rape

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Eversince I learned the craft every verse is a murder rap
No guilt when I'm burnin cats I'm rarely concerned with that
I've returned to disturb the peace, words immersed in heat
I'm a blacksmith, murkin peeps as I disperse my fleet
Every verse is sweet, every word strategically placed
By a mind refined by time, wine the weed and the base
The codeine and the E, my heart was taking big bunny hops
I'm 'completely nuts' like a compilation of money shots

so this is pretty dope like the easy flow and multi usage in it.
def sounds like an audio style to me and easy to follow this. the first 2 lines were my fav on this verse


I'm the hero who appears through the year, I'm the dude you fear
So manly I came on a bitchs face and she grew a beard
My hair cuts the blade, I piss industrial solvents
Leavin Razors more worse for wear than fuckin Scott Hall is
So suck it bitch, try rip out the roots of my anger
And you'll know what it's like to be the route of my anger
Makin anger plays but don't talk shit cause I won't listen bitch
I never fish in a sea of lies I fuckin piss in it

another good verse, liked the razors line that was dope. havnt heard it before. the flow was good and rhyme scheme bout the same as the first verse


I know I've kept you wishin that I'm in inept positions
Now begins the fuckin expedition I accept the mission
I got lasers in my eyes so talkin shit is a no go
I stay 'on top of the game' like I'm the Xbox logo
But I ain't a textcee now fuck that shit I'm sick of it
I don't write battle verses now bitch I write death certificates
But I don't wanna kill you, you're the worst I've heard spit
So why should I 'take your life' when it isn't worth shit ?

good verse prolly my fav so far, more fire in it and more viscious sounding. like the Xbox line and the Death Certificate line, shits nice


Gettin bitches wet enough to fill and flood up the great lakes
I'm the reason your momma got fuckin rid of her Shake Weight
She was tryna say my dick could fuckin pass for a matchstick
She has a big mouth so I gave her an asshole to match it
Haha ... The whore moans cause of my hormones
I fuckin smash up pussies till they look like a war zone
Some suck at suckin dick so I cut their lips off
I'm only 'goin down on them' cause my fuckin dick's soft

lmao this was funny pretty quick twist in your verses. the warzone and the last line was good and funny shit

Fuck a punchline bitch I spit them rocket launcher lines
And they're comin at you fast firing out my monstrous mind
So fuckin target me weak nerds I dare you to start beef
I'll shove a mic in your chest and diss you over your heartbeat
I'm 'above U' like umlauts so fuck all the weak threats
Like good kids before christmas I ain't peaked yet
Fuckin A, the board told me that I couldn't record a tape
Cause to them any verse I make is aurally a form of rape

good verse for a closer and this shit matched the heat from the rest of the verses. nothing really to find wrong with this written. good rhyme scheme and lines that have structure and is cohesive. str8 drop dom