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Im Out Fa Da Green .. Choppin Um Lean
Potz In Da Cream Stop N Juz Steam/
Clockin Drug Skeem Serve It Hot/
Cookin Money Up Work Da Pot
Frum Jers 2 Pac , Bring It Back
Lyk DEATH/ I Get Green
Lyk Tree Activists (In Sets)/
We Grown Men Out Fa Cash No Joke
I Can "kid-less"/Rawer Den A Fetus
Kick Ha Stomick Lef Kid Less/
Pimp A Ho Inna Pink Dress Till No
Tits Left.. Money 2 Da Brain She
Can Give Head/ Try N Dream Street
Let My Cream Speak "Spit Led"/
U'll Get "FLAMED" Fuck A Bag
Lyk Mids Fed.. Shit Sellz
Got Bagz Lyk Dro-Haze..N U Can
"Sniff Ya Face Off" Lyk a Nose Gauge/
Most 8's Three Point Five .. Crushed Frum A Leaf Den Turn'd
White/ Fienes Yea I Gott It "POPPIN" If u Ayn
Seen Da Light/ Piece Of Height (CRACK-CRACK),
Dey Alwayz Come Back Fast .. Ayn Da Past Cat
POTIENCY Givez um Flash Back/ Sack Cash Lyk
Nuts Bleedin Bills/BILLS Yea Fuck Speakin Mills
Oxy's E's Vics Speedin Pills...<U Sick? Im Feedin
iLL/Deadly Fa Loot Till My "Fevas-Grill'd"..Seizers
Will Spazztic Mattic .. Spazzin Maticz Grab Da
Cabbage SAVAGE BLASTIN/
Massive Grabbin Cash .. N Laughin
Stackin Packs Kid/
Runna GET MONEY Till My
Red Timz Turn "black bits"/
Fresh So Fly N i'll Still B Pushin White
Gettin Money If My "Depth So High"..Chest
Go Bye Wan BREATHE Da WEALTH
Den Da Body Heat Iz SELL'D/

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^READ THE RULE.

This is about the 4th time you've been told. Edit your post with a link to a thread you've left feedback in, or i will close your thread untill you do.

Hazard do you understand why we have the rule? That way everyone gets feedback

this was pretty much all forced ass multis, you need alotta vocab work or something

Can Give Head/ Try N Dream Street
Let My Cream Speak "Spit Led"/

For example. You would never say something like that. Its extremely weird. Lol

lol Whyz Diz ?? Cuz U Dun Kno Whadd Im Talkin Bou ... I Kno N Forced Multis ... Na Wuz Juz Flowin LOL@Drunken Jesus ... N 8th Whoeva I Dunno Whadd Da Fuck Ur Talkin Bou In Da Firz Place lol.....................

Yah. I know were you were trying to say and its retarded.

Ok ill try explaining the term "vote link" , which is something you need to include in every new verse you submit in 'The Scriptures'. If you cant understand this , then i quote drunken jesus "You're a fuckin idiot"(or somethin like that).


-Alright , you felt godly lyrical and you're gonna write some kickass verse . First what you do is think....
-Was there ever a thread you read and gave feedback on? If yes , then go to that thread and copy the link of that thread (The link can be found in the address bar at the top of your internet explorer).
-Now go to the Scriptures and post your new verse
and write the subject line $GET MONEY$. Cool
-Now you write your verse in, pretty cool.
-Now before pressing SUBMIT , you paste that link you posted.
-Now you can press submit. thank you.

cause we don't know what your talking about? lmao try again kiddo

do you even know what forced multis are? their strings of multis that don't look or sound natural your verse had alot of them, nothing was complex to the point that anyone with a highschool reading level wouldn't get it, alotta the rhymes are just unnatural and are gibberish

i'll point out just one example

Most 8's Three Point Five .. Crushed Frum A Leaf Den Turn'd
White/ Fienes Yea I Gott It "POPPIN" If u Ayn
Seen Da Light/ Piece Of Height

three point five is straight, leaf den turn'd white? syllables don't match and that ain't how yay's made kiddo lmao, seen da light is straight, but "piece of height" when have you EVER heard someone say piece of height