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feedbaq plz.

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the prophecy of life comes in different mystic ways/
would the world end in a tragedy apocoliptyc way/
or theres no god,and we just living in a bioligical scientific way/
and theres no life after death that day/
ur own spirit snatched away/
the only thing that remains is ur soul starving in pain/
only the tought of death will drive u insane/
cuz if u look at life and death is not the same/
life dosent care about impunity in our immunity/
so to rest in internal peace, is a opportunity/
but i see far visions/
of mass killings coused by CIA tactitions/
of muslims n fake christians/
in a war about religions/
cuz now and days all they talk about is terrorism/
all over television/
but not explaining there mission/
just telling us to listin/
i dont pledge of allegiance/
nigga fuck the the presidents speaches/
i was baptized in black water covered with leaches/
by fake preachers/
but i need a word with the gate keeper/
or grim reaper/
about having they blood on my sneakers/

shit was aait man.. i aint feelin u that much when talkin about the things u do.. i just kinda take day by day.. anyways, u had some nice mulites

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but i see far visions/
of mass killings coused by CIA tactitions/

the prophecy of life comes in different mystic ways/
would the world end in a tragedy apocoliptyc way/

but try to create a better shceme, and not make some of the lines a lot shorter than others, u lose ya flow man.. otherswise it was good

keep it up!

It was ok, Structure was good.

at The Start u Shoulda Kept Goin With That Structure n Multi, it Turned Out Alright in The End Tho, Hit The Subject n Shit. Keep it Up

I Liked it Ova All.. Multis Str8 Structure Good
Concept Was Crack .. Do Ya Thing Nice ..

Dude ur a fucking biter a "FAKE" half thos lyrics are from IMMORTAL TECHNIQUE FT. MOS DEF/(BIN LADEN) Fucking wannabe ass rapper man ur fucking lame ass homo man Damn find a damn lyfe and a pen/pad Foreal


Dayummm tired of wanna-be rappers

Eva1 check that song out (BIN LADEN)

lol suck my dick nigga fucking herb, i kno that already i just switched it up, and homeboy ill eat u up any day for break fast.

Na Na Na don't try to look like u did it on purpose man if it wasen't for me u whoulda got alot more attieon....and waz dis about you can eat me up fo break fast man ya lame u lost to kurse dude what makes u think ur better then me?? No really is it beacuz im new?? is it becauz my stats is low?? na really braw tell me waz good cuz as far as im concerned ill ripp ya punk ass so ...holla at me if u wanna start shit >Mr.Biter/liier/dick rider ... you know my emcee name so call me out lil bitch

Word over dose Wdf you trying 2 play Demented Mind you Fag

considering immortal technique's been his avatar since hes been on the site i doubt he "bit" it on purpose i dunno i haven't heard the track in forever i can't stand 90% of immortal tech's tracks hes either offbeat or rhythmless or a combination of the 2

point iz make ya shit dont switch lines do this n that hip hop/rap or any genre of music iz ta make ppl see shit thru ur eyes and or show em a gud time u no?so stick 2 ya roots n do ya own thing -1-

i was just tryna switch the shit up like the rest of the times ya said i was biting rhymes but i dont give a fuck wat ya say cuz i come up with my own shit,and ova dose i already called u out u bum ass nigga dont get gassed cuz kurse beat me.ur nothing but a sorry excuse for a emcee

im an excuse playa plz man u tha one takin people's shit ...u called me out???..all u said was "ill eat u up any day for break fast." u shit braw i herd ya shit half that shit u say in ya audios has been already said or bitten...so ya kno i whould battle you in all but most like u gonna be shit. (bitting)peoples lines...shit i mean you probaly get bitches to write shit fo ya...gassed out >man Take mutha fucking responsabilty fo lossin dude shit and u sayin im gassed out braw na got all twizted you see ur a lame ass rapper or should i say(Reatard.Attepting.Poetry) so ya know what ill rip you so if these guy's want to hear some real game from a god damn (biter free) Emcee then all means ill have 3-4 tracks 1week dissing ya punk ass so yall think about it (if i should tear another brain cell in this fucks head lemma kno) Not sure tho cuz i whould be jus battlin with a bitch ass wanna-be..but as far as i know my work here is done these words should be a lil advice ,,that people aren't stupid (there's allways gonna be that some1 catching u biting or stupid shit like that) Think about it and when u gotz skills get at me

nigga wrote a essay,anyways nigga why would i have a immortal technique av and bittin his shit like no one will notice wtf? nigga i kno its his shit,i switched it up n put em in my words for the last time,so stop having a bitch fit and battle me u herb ass nigga tlkn bout u too good nigga suck my dick.i called u out in the other forum.


(Reatard.Attepting.Poetry) < lmaoo man lay off the crystal meth man..u cant even type 2 simple words.