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I've been gone, and I return
See such pestalince, I should burn
like Usher, like a Stunter
all these kids, fuckin' fronters
why don't you sit back
why don't you react
reinact, like you really pack
more like you been pact
I seen you before
10 times 1000
You're lyrically poor
I seen better spits from cows and
some camels, with toes
like your momma, oooh
Yeah oooh, its a ooooh
like oh no, where'd you go?
left, shit, sorry *waves*
should I come back another time?
Should I give you an actual rhyme?
Put some thought into this?
fuck no, I'll do this like a impromptue briss
might miss, slice, and now you're a lil girl
you with your necklace made of Pearl
Jammin' it like my friends daughter
Period, revisit, it looks like a slaughter
and all you did was open your legs
All I seem to know to say about you is neg
ative, regulatory, its just mandatory
you tell a story, it gets quite gory
then quite boring, kill someone, don't believe it
you wouldn't write about it, you ain't conceited
Like this fucking record is scratched, repeated
Like this fucking record is scratched, defeated
go on, I told you to set it up
Like you do drugs, piss in a cup
you don't do shit, you can't even spell
you can't raise hell, You ain't no Del
I piss on your steps, your presence
Laugh at your words, your negligence
don't get the inference?
theres alot of difference
you and me, not close
like Lil Wyte's Pose
you got alot of weight to gain
cause he got 3 6, you got a pud stain
jerked off in the shape of modonna
the momma, wait, is that Capadonna?
is that what you whacked it to?
man, don't you know thats a dude?
oh nevermind, you're a woman now
going gangster, pla pla pla pow!
Toy gun waving, getting shot at by cops
Airsoftin' it, cause you soft like flip flops
coushined, you're sad to even mention
so I don't say your name, theres no tension
so don't worry, I didn't even care
but I'll give you Presence with a glare
kids on here beating me, thats rare
especially with shirts on saying D.A.r.E
when all you do is proclaim Truth
Shit, doctor ruth comes harder than you in a booth

first off: LINK

ehh...that wasnt very good. I know who your talkin about, so its levels above dude, but then again thats not sayin much. the rhyme scheme was really simple, and it didnt flow that well. try to have some consistency in the bar length and rhyme scheme, it'll make it flow better. alot of the lines coulda been reworded, because they just sounded kinda elementary.my guess is you did this in a couple minutes and you were just fuckin around. either way, stay up and keep dropin.

I don't need to Link, I've been here long before you were.

And thanks, yes I did do it in a few minutes just listening to a track, was bored, and didn't figure I needed to do much to be better than him. So yeah, I was bored.

Typo even I add a link it makes it more fair and sets a good precedent

It Wuz Str8 ... Seen Diz Guy Come Harda ...
lol ... I Dont Do Nuthin I Talk About Im Sure ...
N I Wouldnt Rap About It LOOOOL Dat Means Half mos Rappaz Iz Fake Den?? lol Im Far Frum Fake I Kno Whadd I Talk BOut But Good Shi anywayz

I don't need to Link,

yes, you do. edit your post with a link or it will be closed.

I've been here long before you were.

and?

man why do we have to have this immature argument on something so simple, just post in the link.

hmmm yeah no.

Suck my balls 8th.