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it's About My Ex And How it All Ended Bad, And How it's Hard 2 See Each Other After All The Drama And Just Be Friends.

Real Feelings Were Present, And ill Never-Forget-it ..//
The Time We Had, Was The Best And i Never Suspected-The-Present ..//
Would Turn Out, Different For Both-Of-Us ..//
The Hope-And-Trust, Lost Value Until it Folded-Up ..//
into a Tiny Piece, Not Destroyed, Rather, Locked-Away ..//
Now im Reaching Out For Something i Can't See Like Jamie Foxx-in-Ray ..//
i Wnna Build Stability Again With Us, But Not-Today ..//
The Dust is Yet To Settle .. But My Thoughts-in-Place ..//
it's Not Something i'll Give Up On, But The Jelly Has Yet-To-Set ..//
Till We Can Look into Each Other's Eyes Again, And Let-Regrets ..//
Fall Aside, a New Day Will Start And We'll Look Ahead-Again ..//
Hopes High, But Not ur Lover Now, as a Friend-That's-Best ..//

http://illestlyrics.com/board/cant-feel ... t2665.html <--Linky

into a Tiny Piece, Not Destroyed, Rather, Locked-Away ..//
Now im Reaching Out For Something i Can't See Like Jamie Foxx-in-Ray

my fav line

shit was tight.. liked it.. some nice multies in there too, although a few places ya rhymes didn't add up.. or it was just me who didn't understand shit..lol.. but flow was good, could have been better tho..

good drop... worth the read, liked it! keep droppin!

into a Tiny Piece, Not Destroyed, Rather, Locked-Away ..//
Now im Reaching Out For Something i Can't See Like Jamie Foxx-in-Ray

THAT WAS Sick As Fuck Man. Incorporating nice lines like that into a story is a skill. Good job. As long as you don't over do it. Which you didn't.

This had pretty nice flow, a "decent story" for how short it was. And most importantly a blue font again. Which is fucking hard on the eyes. And going to make me stop reading your pieces!

Good Shit Domino. Gotta Lemme Cop It If You Record It..!! Dope Piece Though Man, We Need To Collab Some Time..Get At Me Man.

im 50/50 Sure About Recordin it. And Yeah it Aint All The Story Just The 1st Verse, Summary Shit Ya Kno Lol. Plus i Like The Blue Font, Might Change it After, Ty For The Feed @ All 3

Would Turn Out, Different For Both-Of-Us ..//
The Hope-And-Trust, Lost Value Until it Folded-Up ../

best part i think^ overall gud homie nice topic -1-

Damn Son .. Ya Multis Wit This Concept Dropped
Nice N The Bars The Put Up Were My Favorite
2 You Did A Good Job Emotion Felt .. Keep
Droppin

lol i liked that "Now im Reaching Out For Something i Can't See Like Jamie Foxx-in-Ray ..// " line but it seemed a lil long but nice simile...this piece was pretty decent seemed sort of like poetry cause u were usin alot of emotion but i like it, keep it up...8/10

the rhythm was a tad choppy in parts but overall this was a nice piece, you're not really forcing any multis anymore like you used to