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Just A Thought
Posted: Wed Jan 17, 2007 1:21 am
by B-Bear
Just a Thought.. the short part.. lol
searchin for conclusions of your odd illusions
my contributions will leave u with solutions
cause u're escaping from a world of perplexity
struggle ya hardest, but never reach complexity
got an axe in me, that really tear me up inside
as i'm subsiding, unable to ride this wave any longer
the ancient ferry takes me to the kingdom of death
i'll be locked in my corpse, gotta enjoy my last breath
Link:
http://illestlyrics.com/board/mac-u-rea ... t3081.html
Posted: Wed Jan 17, 2007 1:34 am
by Haz
i'll be locked in my corpse, gotta enjoy my last breath
^^^ Datz a Deep Line .. If You Try n Come Up Wit More Typa Deep Stuff Like That n Had it All in One Solid Verse i Think it would Have Alotta Potential Man lol Your Emotions On point .. Good Shit i enjoyed Diz Lil Read Keep doin U `1
Posted: Wed Jan 17, 2007 2:36 am
by ~Symbolikull~
yeah this was a nice short verse, its got me wantin to read more man.
Posted: Thu Jan 18, 2007 3:09 am
by B-Bear
yeah.. like i said, this was the short part..
thanks ghost.. appreicate feedback, u too hazard!
Posted: Thu Jan 18, 2007 3:19 am
by precise
good to see your still droppin here b-bear
youre definately improving on your rhymes, and youre topic is deeper than usual, which is good, probably draws the rhymeskill outa you.
anyways keep at it, elevate
peace
Posted: Thu Jan 18, 2007 8:19 am
by Mac
Good Shit Man, I Agree With Precise It Got Me Wanna Read More. Over All It Was Pretty Dope, You Fell Off On One Line Wich Aint Bad So Props Man You're Definately Gettin Better Like Precise Mentioned. Keep DRoppin Man.
Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 5:01 am
by B-Bear
thanks.. appreciate feedback fellas!! haha.. i'm still droppin, just not so often.. don't post everything i write when I'm done wit it.. like to mix, and leave it for a while, then to look over it later and maybe exchange certain parts of it.. that's really why i aint droppin so often..
Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 7:08 am
by Mac
Most Of What I Drop Is Off The Top For The Most Part. I Don't Hardly Drop All My Writtens Either. So I Feel You.
Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 9:10 am
by |.R.SON.aLL.|
it`s Short as Hell ..
But it`s Koo` i Guess ..
Was This a Keystyle ??..
Or Written ??..
Posted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 1:36 am
by B-Bear
it's a very short part of a written.. like i said earlier, wanna look over the verse one more time before posting it, so it'll soon be here..
Posted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 3:30 am
by ~Symbolikull~
i see your point about not droppin all the time, or at least not postin every written, sometimes it aint worth the time to post everything, cuz you wont get the feed back that you want, but like i said earlier you should finish this piece wit the feed that you got from hazard and post it again.
Posted: Sun Jan 21, 2007 10:26 am
by Mac
No Doubt ^^