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im Da Fireman Mos Say i Sell Heat Hard Bodied Like A Shelby
you Betta Rest ya Chest Wit "Breaths of Best" Catch A Shell-b/
i'll Perfect My Piece Like Gandi N Luther Rosa Parks
i Let Off Shots U'll See Hottiez Scoop Up ya Whole Head Part/
Makin Dough in Da Kitchen We Da Bosses Haz Da Whole Head Part
Runnin The Green Your Pockets Had A "Hole-Head-Start"
Hold Head Charts Blows A Calculation Homie im Da Pimp
And i Keep On Rollin Papa U Kno Me Yes im Da Shiit/
im Da Shitt you Stepp on Me i'll Leave Ya Body Stinkin
Product Got No "Odor" Unless ya Cheesey Body Stinkin/
Most Of You Guys Are Already "Ripped Pieces" Like Shakespeares
Nothin But Fakes Here Leakin Hott "chest-Defused" ShakeSpears/

Im a lil off wit this one, didnt really know where this one was goin, you had some nice lines n shit but re-usin yuh rhymes kinda made it a lil confusin to me

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im Da Fireman Mos Say i Sell Heat Hard Bodied Like A Shelby
you Betta Rest ya Chest Wit "Breaths of Best" Catch A Shell-b/

Aiight Thanks Fa Da Feed Back

yea first line was the best.. this sounds like it belongs in a club like all the other crunk music..nothing i'd really listen to if given the option

Aiiight Thanks For The Feed Back

I Agree. Honestly, You Been Slipping Lately But That's Beside The Point.

Over All: Structure Was The Best Quality Of This Post, I Wasn't Feeling The Whole Rhyming The Same Word Over An Over, Nothing Really Stood Out To Me, Cept The First Line Which Was Already Commented On, I've Seen Better From You Though. But Keep Dropping Man.

pretty decent multis and rhyming, vocab was a lil basic and topic was a bit boring but still decent keep it up

fav line:Makin Dough in Da Kitchen We Da Bosses Haz Da Whole Head Part
Runnin The Green Your Pockets Had A "Hole-Head-Start"

btw wdf is everybody copyin my fav line thing.

LOL 16 Micz i Dunno Man i Jus got Da Hang Of
Tha Whole Fav Line Shit When i'm Leavin
Feed But Thanks Fa Da Feed Back Everyone