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i come to ya room and take you back to hell
you in doom , you stuck in my fucking realm
i beat ya heads off,till the angels of heaven can't take enough
and i cough ya spit to fuck u up , have you chainde and hand cuffed
i eat ya babies ,i eat ya fucking families
my lines surge up a chill to ya spine like a fucking desease
i captivate yoursoul and put it in a deep freeze
i'm hungry for war so watch out
you live me dying tomorow , you read those lines i blow ya brains out
i'm gonna tell you what this is all about
thats revenge for day i got knocked out
i couldn't sleep cuz my head was hurting
swollen with pain and burning
i stayed up all nite crying
i could't remain in the light cuz the good in me was dying

so i take you one by one
i break ya fucking limbs one by one
until the enemies and the pains are gone
its a never ending mission son

better than ur last one..but could still use some work...sounds like somethin id write back in the day wen i always had pissed off verses n shit..lol...if u can get a rhyme scheme going ur verses would b alot better...and less repetition of words...if ne thing jst take a good 30 minutes and make a verse....seems like ur puttin these together in a matter of 5 minutes...jst a freestyle type...if u give it more of a thought process ull come out wit alot better lines and rhymes n stuff like dat...keep tryin tho..

i eat ya babies

lmfao must be related to allkillah

as far as wat to tell u.. pretty much wat viral said.. just keep practicing

Nah, I ain't related to nobody wack, word is bond my grandma could shit on him