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Yall Mutha fuckaz Started haten Cus Haz Brought his Girl to This site//
But remember im the only bitch who be Popin it right//
Lockin it tight maken Mutha fuckaz think ima ghost When i write
ima show yall motha fuckaz ima bitch wit a bite//
The only female on here that can Flow real Nice//
ima shine real bright Let a muh fucka kno im as cold as ice//
dont get cha brainz in a knot my man prolly bag ya whole life//
These Bitchz Cant be Me i Feed off These Bitchz Envy n jealousy//
i kill tracks like scratchin c.d.z royal my residence back in d.c.//
You cant see LadieHazard rippin verses Wit my man my Hataz
like mummys sittin in hurses while i stand//
i Got my Feet Firmly Planted on The Solid Groundz of this land
im Feedin Bitchs death out the palm of Ma Hand//
i can have a bitch Feelin suicidal wit a gun to ha head Popin off nuin but hollow tiped led//
Rememberin everything That once was said Fuckin wit LadieHaz Ya whole fam mite Turn up dead//

ay girl go in and edit this verse, for every ( // ) you have press return, it'll put a whole new aspect to your flow

no thanks for the advice

pretty basic but nice for a beginner( i hope ur a beginner) but anyway check the last word of every line, ice, nice, bite, write, pretty basic wouldnt u agree try to use more than 1 syllable and your inner rhyming was good, the topic was blah but keep it up nice work..

i Like This Verse ..
it Was Kinda Choppy On Some Parts ..
HELLa Ssssstttttrrrrrreeeettttcccchhhhheeedddd Out ..
Quit Repeatin` yaSelf So Much ..
But Other Then That ..
Everythin` Else Was aiight ..
Keep Doin` U ..

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The only female on here that can Flow real Nice//
ima shine real bright Let a muh fucka kno im as cold as ice/

nice bar..^^...ur structure def improved just needa up ur vocab u feel me?decent doe -1-

lmao.. but yeah, shit was aaiit.. u gotta extend yavocab in ya writtens..flow was straight ..keep droppin, first I've seen from u, but u'll get better in here.. just keep droppin u know..

Spam Cleaned Up (my bad) - uppin for feedback -

Fix your spelling enough for this to be legible. Then I will leave feedback.

lol cus u aint got shit to say now hush...puppy

?! No. I wouldn't want my topic spammed. I'm just being reasonable.

lol...

Don't act like your something good Ladie, you and your boy wish to think you're hot shit...hes had one good verse...and then fell back into the shitter. You probably pulled him back in. Or maybe you just masturbate too much on the seat and got infected by some left over crap.

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typeo why do you keep referring to hazards verse against you, it wasn't that good at all it was the same shit he typically writes, maybe a tad better, your verse just wasn't as good

and ladie this verse wasn't that good, it was decent you make more sense than hazard but your multis aren't good which isn't a bad thing considering he forces most of his, just work on writing and your vocab'll develop so it'll be easier to rap more syllables