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lil somethin i made,that i thought id juz drop got writers block towards the end lol...but here it is..

im 'engaged ta murder', the way my hands are covered in red
constintly tryna unlock this rage further, with a pen or smoothered in lead
either way i gotta be a believer ta day, and figure out what my tasks will be & are
i can look ahead into time and even pray,but it wont change the fact the past iz neva far
and damn my nose aint gotta be between books ta know i get mean looks
from the people who are feins-n-'cook' there lives away,wonderin why there teams shook

i know the structure is a lil fucked lol but i made it quick lastnight cuz i was bored n went ta bed...leave a lil feed -1-

it's Pretty Good For Whatever Kinda Piece it Was. Lol Cant Really Explain The Topic. u Never Really Fell Off at The End With The Writers Block And The Multis And imagery Were There. Cool Shit Keep Droppin

ye idk i thought i did lol might add more later idk...thanx tho domino...uppin -1-

This Was a Pretty Rando Drop ..
Lol ..
Umm .. Pretty Koo` For Wateva it is ..

lol ye i know

im 'engaged ta murder', the way my hands are covered in red
constintly tryna unlock this rage further, with a pen or smoothered in lead

first line was the best. Like you said, the structure is a lil messed up. The bars are just streched way out, it would be hard to spit to a beat. I would like to see more multis, it would have made it flow alot better. not much else to say cause it was so short, but stay up.

word..thanx ill keep @ it