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"Dear President" letter and George Almighty-rap

Posted: Sat Jan 27, 2007 9:37 pm
by Spoof
http://illestlyrics.com/board/post19917.html#19917

yeah I don't like Bush, leave sum feed, give me tips, advices, criticism anything. Haters can bounce off.

"Dear President,

here are few little problems I expect you to solve. I'm not blaming you though, they aren't YOUR fault!
The global warming caused a flood that took away my tent. I guess the flood came because the poles have started to melt. And last week while you ate tunafish in your mansion, my friend died to a cancer because of UV-radiation. Ofcourse it's not your fault, you didn't make that hole to the ozone layer, size of the USA, did you know? And that hole is just getting bigger and bigger, which means that people are also getting sicker much quicker! But even though, everyone blame YOU and I don't like it! You can't be the culprit to the changes of the climate. I mean, you signed that contract that protects it, didn't you? I'm a big fan of yours, can I please come to visit you?
I want to hear you joking, like you do when you're on TV. At these hard times being funny can't be too easy. You're always there to liven up the atmosphere, like a big brother! And makeing funny about things that are serious to others.
And what's that big fuss about those stupid rain forests? You have saved oxygen for people, haven't you, don't be modest! You got it in some tank enough to save the whole Earth! Oh you're so wise and I'm sure your plan will work.
I know you will feed all the poor people too, how generous! You have lots of good things to tell about yourself, when you are writing your memoires. And about the war, I know you really don't care about the oil! You did it because you wanted to destroy terrorism, for everybody's joy.
You are such a noble man, the savior of this planet! I think you really are God, truly yours:
Janet"

GEORGE ALMIGHTY

(Talking)
Now everybody hail the Mighty President of the world!
His great wisdom has now been confirmed!
Don't y'all bother your lil heads with the issues of the future.
Cus he's got it all under control, including the faith of our culture.
We don't have to be afraid no more, cus he's here with us.
We will be safe with him, the best one of all leadaz.
Quit worrying, and march proudly beside him!
We will be invincible with George Almighty.

(Rap)
Did y'all know that Mr. Bush is going to feed us all?//
With that black soft liquid he calls "Black gold"//
We ain't gonna starve when it ruins the air we breath//
cus we'll eat that gold when plants ain't able to live//
when plants die and kids cry we'll cook bacon in oil//
Don't y'all know that you can use it just like you use soy?//
Except that we ain't got no bacon cus there ain't no food fo' pigs//
Who's gonna fix this? Shit, we ain't even have grass for cigs!//
But no worries cus Mr. President will solve our issues//
"Kids are crying? Give 'em a lollipop and a tissue"//
Yay that's the sentence we all wanted to hear//
Did you try to be funny again to liven up the atmosphere??//
See you do that pretty often and unlike "Janet"//
We ain't laughing to that, you fucking war fanatic!//
If you want to see happy people, go to the graveyard//
They're smiling cus they died before the pain started//
We will all suffocate when those smokeclouds cover the sky//
And you'll cry when you realize what you've done with your life!!//
Cus you ain't gonna live forever and we share our faith with you//
And you'll cry when that true fact comes and hits you!!//
I just told people the truth and now the agents are here//
They'll get rid of me so that I can't ruin your career//
But I don't have to do that, you can do it by yourself//
And you have already done that and who's gonna help//
your ass when people finally realize what you are?//
You ain't even got a gun cus all the minerals are gone//
How you gonna make guns when there ain't no materials left??//
You're leading this world to your own shitty funeral Geoff!//
You ain't gonna get away with this, people will know you're phoney//
Maybe you didn't know but we're all in this shit together, homie//

(Talking)
Now everybody hail the dumbass president of the world!
His GIANT stupidnes has now been confirmed!
Do bother your heads with the issues of our future.
Cus that jackass is ruining everything, including our culture.
We have to be afraid what that lunatic will make up next!
But beware if you wanna know the truth, you'll get shots on your chest.
Don't be dumb and march like an idiot beside him!
Cus that man is destroying the tale of George Almighty.
You're gone.

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 4:32 am
by Spoof
I read from sumwhere that this site is a site where feedback is guaranteed so can I please get sum lol

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 4:37 am
by -TraMaTiK-
ur structure is a lil differentbut its ok..took a few mins ta read it all lmao..butttttttt it wasnt 2 bad ta b honest..sum parts where shabby other parts were nice..overall id give it a 7.5/10...keep droppin tho -1-

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 4:48 am
by Spoof
thanks for tha feed mayne, much appreciated

the structure might be a bit odd in the "Dear President" but that's cus it's not a rap, it's just a letter lol

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 4:51 am
by -TraMaTiK-
ye i know that lol but still it was pretty good stay droppin -1-

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 8:00 am
by B-Bear
But no worries cus Mr. President will solve our issues//
"Kids are crying? Give 'em a lollipop and a tissue"//

fav line^^

it was good for u bein a rookie, nice concept.. a lil bit played out, but always nice readin another person's view man.. although u need to expand ya vocab and the rhymes... it's sorta too simple, in my opinion when only rhyimg one syllable, that somethin u should work with.. and the multies will come with that rhyming thing, u'll notice.. keep droppin homez!

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 8:29 am
by Lawgix
lol that shit don't matter here... rookies, rhyme master, w/e well girl i've got to tell u that i LOVED the whole dear bush thing... but it seemed more like a poem from my point of view... still a good drop... check out my poem for america... give it some feed... it disses mr bush AND cheney :p fuck republicans!!!!

good drop

Lawgix

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 6:13 pm
by ~*Blitz*~
I enjoyed readin it but it lost me in a few areas - overall i think it was pretty good though - good job!

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 10:23 pm
by Spoof
aiight thanks fo' tha feed everybody, much appreciated! yeah fuck republicans lol I'll check that drop of yours Lawgix :)

upping!

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 10:35 pm
by Momeijah
If you want to see happy people, go to the graveyard//
They're smiling cus they died before the pain started//
We will all suffocate when those smokeclouds cover the sky//
And you'll cry when you realize what you've done with your life!!//
^^^ Lol Lovin That.
Real Down 2 Earth Shit Tho Like Kinda Seperatin The '2 Worlds'... And That Graveyard Line is True Lol. Each Generation is Gnna Have it Worse Off The Way Things Are Goin. What i Liked Tho is How u Were Acting Like 'All These Ppl Dying But George Bush is The Amazing President He'll Save Us All'... Thats Surreal Shit Lol And Pretty Much Sums Up How u Feel. Flowed Nice, Multis Were Good When u Used Them. Hit The Topic Nicely. Keep Droppin

Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 10:42 pm
by Spoof
thank you very much for tha feed, looking good! :)

upping!