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i Was a Lost Image Fallin Into A Black Hole
Till Like Ciggerette Sales Packs Sold Got My Firs Crack O/
Niggaz Wus Askin Fa Me To "Spot Um" Like Red Dot Scopez
Always "Pay" Like Paragraph's (Read N Chose) Attention Wit/
My Head Twistin Coke Make Niggaz break Dey Neck Fa Strokes
I Was On My Lil Legs God Knows Kept My Weight Up like Hott Dough
Known As a Scrub Da Bitchez Wan Diz Thug Cuz My Hott Dough.../
Wrestlin Niggaz Fa Stacks Call Me Hustler Dot Macho.. Costumaz Popp
Lots Know .. Like "Many Informed" U Runnin ya Form Da Semi Informed/
S0UL $T@CKz .. Sold Stackz Hold Packz Bigga Den "Pro Trackz" Run it Around
Niggaz Wuz Against Drugs Fa Da Sound D.A.R.E Me... Blow Back Dey Bluntin it Now/

Damn hun past couple of verses u posted in here seem pretty deep u gettin betta ive always like ya style tho nu kno that..

Ty

Yoo When U Leave Feed Back u Should
Break it Down in Cats Or Point Out Whadd Linez
U Like

"i Was a Lost Image Fallin Into A Black Hole
Till Like Ciggerette Sales Packs Sold Got My Firs Crack O/"

^ I Don't Get It..Hazard I Think You Just Throw Words Together
*In Order For A Clean Flow You Should Use Only Words That HAVE to Be There.

"Niggaz Wus Askin Fa Me To "Spot Um" Like Red Dot Scopez"

^That's Better, Makes Sense.

"Always "Pay" Like Paragraph's (Read N Chose) Attention Wit/"

^But Then You Fell Off, Cuz That Makes No Sense Man..

"My Head Twistin Coke Make Niggaz break Dey Neck Fa Strokes
I Was On My Lil Legs God Knows Kept My Weight Up like Hott Dough"

^Makes No Sense Man..The Weight Up like Hott Dough Kinda Does
*Like When You Bake it, It Rises Right?

"Known As a Scrub Da Bitchez Wan Diz Thug Cuz My Hott Dough.../
Wrestlin Niggaz Fa Stacks Call Me Hustler Dot Macho.. Costumaz Popp
Lots Know .. Like "Many Informed" U Runnin ya Form Da Semi Informed/"

^Makes Sense Till The Last Line "U Runnin Ya Form Da Semi Informed"
*Makes no Sense, Again, Only Use Words That HAVE To Be There

"S0UL $T@CKz .. Sold Stackz Hold Packz Bigga Den "Pro Trackz" Run it Around
Niggaz Wuz Against Drugs Fa Da Sound D.A.R.E Me... Blow Back Dey Bluntin it Now/"

^Makes Sense , But It's Still Sloppy

Like Your Title Man, You're Pushin It. Let It Coast. Your Biggest Problem Is You Just Throw Words Together When You Should Use Only Words That HAVE To Be There, To A Point If You Remove ONE Word It Won't Work. It's Gotta Be Tight An Solid. You Got Skill It's Just Camouflaged, You're Sloppy. Take Your Time, Chill With The Ebonics, Clean It Up A Little Bit, And Just Stop Throwin Words Together.

Mhmm Aiight Mac Attac

You Feel Me Though?

Yea i Kno Whadd U Sayin