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i put the pen 2 the paper,lettin my thoughts run thru the ink
the anger,the sadness,it all juz becomes written within a blink
each droplet thats spreadsover the paper,is justa another feelin
another thought,another a reason,that im finally revealin
what i got bottled up,cuz man shits gettin kinda hard
i mean,the demos,the brush offs,is this a makin of a star?
cuz honestly im confused,my minds abused
i rhyme with a lit fuse,ta show u how ill use
this diversity,shit FUCK U,try and curse at me
this verse'll be worse u'll see,a hearse'll be
parked at ur door,and im sparked n ready 4 more
spittin the truth,till my fuckin heart gets sore
if only yall knew,that i call the spot ta be
'heaven in'a few words',but all i got iz me..

leave sum feed -1-

uppin

that's a nice drop, even it's quite short. I think that every single MC round here is able to relate to that

it's an Ok Drop, Not 1 Of ur Better Verses. Emotion Was There Throughout, Multis Were Present at Some Parts But it Seemed Like u Had Writer's Block.. Coulda Explained The Whole Scenario Better, it Was Dope Enough Tho, Keep Droppin

Definitely Seen Better, You Had Emotion Through Out The Whole Piece, But That's All That Was There Honestly. You Had Really No Multies, It Was Basic Rhyming, And It Lacked Creativity A Lot. Over All It Was " Ok " But You Can Do A Lot Better, And I've Seen A Lot Better From You.
5/10

I will agree wit Mac on this one, i like the point of the rap, but you coulda put more in to it, i would have tog ive this one a 6/10

word..ye i kinda was blank..but thankx 4 the feed -1-