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ok its my first verse ever..feedback plz and thanks

i dnt claim to be the 'illest'/ but ill make u shiver till ur skinless/
might be the joke of this site/ but at least my standards are at a huge height/
spite/ goes to every guy in this site/ king plex/ flexing like he got something to show/
'LadySubsist' had subsist on the up and go/ flow? i see none in his ryhmes/ this dude
worse than me and my first time/ shine/ is what im all about/ got 'men'
in here thinking bout me from time to time/ domino on the other hand,
can spit some good lines/ yea your right/ i think i lost my mind/
hazard always turning this into a bore/ for what im gna say he'll think im a whore/
did u find your girl stranded on the sea shore?/
samuri JK talking bout 'tapping that ass'/ the only thing he'll be
'tapping' is his mums water glass/ blast!/ is what three sams do to a site/
God u have all this attractiveness, illest must be doing something right/
Anyways I think this is tite!/ im out like a mutha fucker aight?

good shit good shit...u showed it to me on MSN....for ur first verse its pretty dope...keep it up...

omg, i loved it!! you def have potential and i think you did good for your first time, wahoo!

domino on the other hand,
can spit some good lines/ yea your right/ i think i lost my mind/ Lmfao

Flow Was Kinda Choppy And The Rhymeschemes, Punches Were Cooool Lol. Keep Droppin!

eww viral beat me at posting *kicks him*

We Need a Girl's League! Lmao

~*Blitz*~ wrote:eww viral beat me at posting *kicks him*

*grabs foot n snaps ankle*

chill out

hey hey hey no fightng in my spot!

hazard always turning this into a bore/ for what im gna say he'll think im a whore/
did u find your girl stranded on the sea shore?/
^^ i'll Reply To Dat a Lil Lata
But it Was Decent Fa ya First Shit lol Cant Wait
To Catch U Sam..haha

lmaoo nooo haha it was the only thing that rhymed!! hahaha glad u thought it was decent!

LOL tre i think the three sams should start our own girly crew and no boys allowed!!

LoL Fair Do's But a Girl League Would Be interesting.

lol...

YAY comments lmao

hahaha very kickass for a first drop, your on the right track for sure