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Its Deception! Children get baptized for life to be loyal, their to Serve for Protection of Jesus,
The ministers make them believe to fight for our soil wit Words used Injectin the Treason,
Only worried about self-proclamation, power, Net Worth and Neglectin the Reason,
Churches take over from within, produce Hurt and Constantly Workin, Testin our Demons,
Like Im eternally damned, losin to the apartheid while im buried in the Dirt, my Intestines are Bleedin,
Jus do a Search each Confessional Speakin, is brain washin against Purps Reflectin on Meanin,
God, Jesus, Moses and Buddha, arose from the ashes to release our sins to Open our Future?,
Who decides the bible is right, its personal assumption, and I believe they have a dyin Devotion to Use Yuh,

An athiest is no way a patriot,
always contradicting his contemplation on whether or Not to Believe in the Book,

If theres a God then satan exists,
jus as Christians do, but they Believe they can Stop and Relieve pain witta Look,

Oh how pathetic Humans can Be,
your told how to act, what and what not to do, theres no realness jus Stupidity,

I could care less if you think its....
slander, blasphemy or fictional writtens I write wit Personal Validity its what I Choose to Be,

People willin to give up Life by a Cross,
fuck that! Id rather Die for a Cause, some re-writtin junk, Lines fulla Flaws,

Religions act like Lives are a Cost,
of true freedom, its jus releasing fumes into your system like Pipes of Exausts,

So go ahead hate me cuz I aint Hatin on You,
Im merely speakin my mind and to me Im jus Statin the Truth,

So bring the battle I have plenty Patience to Lose,
cuz Ima bring down your heavens like I was Satan to You!!!!

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Lol I'll Argue This Point In A Drop Sometime...

But Yeah..Good Points On The Baptisms..,
Flow Was Nice..Vocab Was Meh...But With Ya Style You Don't Need It In AnyWay.



An athiest is no way a patriot,
always contradicting his contemplation on whether or Not to Believe in the Book,

If theres a God then satan exists,
jus as Christians do, but they Believe they can Stop and Relieve pain witta Look,


Dope Bars!

thanx yall appreciate it

UppIN

this is really nice man like the style change n stayed on topic it was nice dude... keep it up!!! peace!

n this i liked it killed it in my eyes

I could care less if you think its....
slander, blasphemy or fictional writtens I write wit Person Validity its what I Choose to Be,

People willin to give up Life by a Cross,
fuck that! Id rather Die for a Cause, some re-writtin junk, Lines fulla Flaws,

thanx homie....its appreciated

UppIN

really liked the first part, mad vocab shown.. straight flow.. u're like a philosophizing emcee man.. really enjoy reading ya verses.. props..

second part was nice.. didn't catch ya style tho.. messed up the flow a bit.. but good to see how u experimentin with new styles.. keep it up man

thanx for the feed B-Bear, i really appreciate all the feed on this, and this is jus my views.

Big Ups to everyone who left Feed


UppIN

this was a nice piece, original structure and it worked well, flowed well, rhymed well, deep stuff

People willin to give up Life by a Cross,
fuck that! Id rather Die for a Cause, some re-writtin junk, Lines fulla Flaws,

Religions act like Lives are a Cost,
of true freedom, its jus releasing fumes into your system like Pipes of Exausts,

So go ahead hate me cuz I aint Hatin on You,
Im merely speakin my mind and to me Im jus Statin the Truth,

So bring the battle I have plenty Patience to Lose,
cuz Ima bring down your heavens like I was Satan to You!!!!

^^^^ mad good lines!

thanx spoof i appreciate the feed


UppIN

Put together in a creative way. I like how you're expanding your horizons a little bit.

I really have no reservations about this piece. It was good for what is was. It didn't go beyond my expectations. Though it didn't go below them.

You brought up some really true shit though. For example

"us do a Search each Confessional Speakin, is brain washin against Purps Reflectin on Meanin,
God, Jesus, Moses and Buddha, arose from the ashes to release our sins to Open our Future?"

Then all of your bold points. Made some very good point to.

This didn't really have good flow. It would have been a great spoken word piece. Which might interest you as well.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Spoken_word

Thanx Plex Appreciate yuh Feed Man....
Yeah It was jussa OutLook Drop, tryin somethin New you Know

Big Ups & Still UppIN