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Hey Children Hows It Going?

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Santa Is a Fat Prick That Doesnt Bring Any Presents Its Your Mom Yes Kids Its A Pure Disgrace..//
Get That Warm Felling On Chirstmas Eve Thats Just When i Leave a "sack full "over ya face..//
Not In The Holiday Mode So On Chirstmas Day Dont Come Running "Turning-To-Me"..//
Its A Event For Kids Learning-To-See Cuz If you Over Eight Watch Me Start Burning-The-Tree.//
I Wont Misses Clause To Give Me Head I Dont Care If Its Infectious Just Go Low And "Lick It"..//
Ill Bake Kids Dirty Cookies And Watch Then Puke And Scream Fuck You Just to Get In The Xmas Spritz
I Get Sick To Death Seeing Lucky Kids Opeing Presnts Like Its The Day Of-There-Life..//
Hear Little Kid Ill Cut Ya Brakes Now Ride Down This Hill On Ya Brand New Push-Bike..//( I Dare Ya)
I Cant Wait For My Xmas Money And Get a Huge Boner And Hire a Nude-Of-A-Dancer..//
Watch Me Skin Open The Raindeers And Make a Comftable Coat Of Reudoff-And-Prancer...//

christmas was a LOOOOOOOONG time ago lol but nice drop

Watch Me Skin Open The Raindeers And Make a Comftable Coat Of Reudoff-And-Prancer...//

^^ totally wrong - JERK!

This drop was um...intresting lol! I had to go back and re-read a few of lines to try and make sense out of it. But it was funny and rhyming about santa is creative lol Good job!

LOL. you prolly just found out santas your parents and your mad.

but uh, it was decent i guess. the line length was wayyyy to long. I would say work on multis and a much shorter line length.

I Cant Wait For My Xmas Money And Get a Huge Boner And Hire a Nude-Of-A-Dancer..//
Watch Me Skin Open The Raindeers And Make a Comftable Coat Of Reudoff-And-Prancer...//

i guess that would be the best line. you coulda worded it alot better.

but jeah, multies and line length. and a psychiatrist...

but stay up & keep dropin.

lol different ill say...lol@blitz gettin mad at that line..nice work tho man -1-

i Dare u 2 Record That And Give it 2 Kids

good idea ill start keying it up.

Send it 2 Me 2 Lol

lol yeah ill make this a audio...i got school now ill do it when i get home

lmao nice topic! and nice drop!

I think people are way to generous with feedback.

This drop was horrible. It wasn't funny, the topic sucked,
the lines are to long. There isn't enough inner rhymes to
justify such a thing. The multis seemed force. The flow had
absolutely no flow.

You need to shorten your bars.

I found nothing good about this at all. 3/10.

Very disappointing.

^^ it was deff a interestin topic but dam you stretched out those lines to shit and yu didnt have the rhymes to back it up half the time i kno yu can do better than that lookin forward to your next drop

Interesting to who? Little kids? I don't get it.

Yo Lil Homie!!!! Forget about this drop and jus move on, i think jus readin this gave me a brain anerism, my eyes started twitchin and my ears fell off....not to sure where you were tryin to go wit this, but the flow wasnt there and your vocab was wack, structure was fucked from beginnin to end, the idea and substance in your lines lacked major intelligence, this drop showed your age and in-experience like a muh fucka. it jus seems like you were tryin way to hard to flow and rhyme and it jus ended up bein a bunch of drunken babble.

STEP YOUR GAME UP SON!!!!

big ups and keep droppin

lol ok? thanks complexity for the being honest