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This is a verse I submitted for a contest that 50 Cent and G-Unit currently running. Best verse that ties in with the new 50 video FUNERAL MUSIC and the 50 beef...wins a whole bunch of shit. So who knows...this is my verse AND my very first written scripture here on illest...so lemme know whut'cha think.

REAL TALK...

COME ON CAM, WHY YOU WANNA GET TO STARTIN SUM BEEF//
I AIN'T G-UNIT, BUT EVEN I'LL VOLUNTEER TO PISTOL WHIP YA TEETH//
YOU SEEN THE VIDEO, 50 GOT MORE GUNS THEN THA GUARD//
WATCH WHAT THE FUCK YOU SAYIN NIGGA IT AIN'T DAT HARD//
FIRST YOU FUCK UP WIT JAY, ALL YOU DO IS BURN BRIDGES//
YOU AIN'T GONNA HAVE SHIT TO SAY, AFTER YO ASS LEFT IN STITCHES//
ACTING LIKE A BOSS NIGGA, YOU WISH YOU WAS CALLIN THE SHOTS//
CAM WE ALL KNOW THE ONLY SHIT YOU GONNA BE CALLIN'S THE COPS//
JIM IS DOIN SUMTHIN, HELL WE KNOW JUELZ DOIN SUMTHIN//
THE FUCK KOCH PAYIN YOU FOR NIGGA, YO ASS AIN'T DOIN NUTHIN//
HAVEN'T HEARD ANYTHING DECENT OUTTA YA SINCE CONFESSIONS//
FUNERAL MUSIC IS A WARNING NIGGA, NOT ONE OF THE LESSONS//
YOU OPENED YA MOUTH BOI, BEST BELIEVE YA GONNA GET YOURS//
KILLA CAM, FUCK A KILLA CAM...WE KICKIN DOWN DOORS//
YOU HAVE THAT WEAK DISS ON THE FRONT OF THE DIP SITE//
WHY? YOU WANNA SHOW ONLINE JUST HOW HARD YOU DICK RIDE//
YOU AINT PUSHIN WEIGHT NIGGA, YOU KNOW YOU'ZE A LIAR//
YOUR AN OLD MAN NOW, FACE IT NIGGA IT'S TIME TO RETIRE//
ONE DAY I'MA BE REPPIN G-UNIT AS THE NIGGA FROM THE MIDWEST//
AND WHEN THAT TIME COME YA BETTER ASK CURTIS FOR HIS OLD VEST//
YOU GONNA NEED IT NIGGA// I GOTTA ITCHY FINGA//
GET ME A G-UNIT CONTRACT, BEST BELIVE I'MA PULL A TRIGGA//
MAYBE ONE DAY JUELZ AND JIMMY GONNA QUIT FUCKIN WIT YOU//
AND BEFORE YOU KNOW IT...DIPSET FITTIN TO SIGN WIT G-UNIT TOO//

WORD.

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If you can't see the video lemme know and I'll leave a link

good ima diss g-unit!

That was nice..like it all the way..

Good lookin out on the feedback guys....Uppin for more.

ACTING LIKE A BOSS NIGGA, YOU WISH YOU WAS CALLIN THE SHOTS//
CAM WE ALL KNOW THE ONLY SHIT YOU GONNA BE CALLIN'S THE COPS//


haha so tru^..not bad kurse 4 a lil drop on scriptures definetly good 4 a 1st drop in this section...u shud write more juz ta do it..elevate lyrically and be a beast with uyr audio u'd be even krazyer lol feel me?stay droppin n try usin more multis...-1-

ACTING LIKE A BOSS NIGGA, YOU WISH YOU WAS CALLIN THE SHOTS//
CAM WE ALL KNOW THE ONLY SHIT YOU GONNA BE CALLIN'S THE COPS//
JIM IS DOIN SUMTHIN, HELL WE KNOW JUELZ DOIN SUMTHIN//
THE FUCK KOCH PAYIN YOU FOR NIGGA, YO ASS AIN'T DOIN NUTHIN//

YOU HAVE THAT WEAK DISS ON THE FRONT OF THE DIP SITE//
WHY? YOU WANNA SHOW ONLINE JUST HOW HARD YOU DICK RIDE// <----- LMAO funny as hell!
^^^^^^my fav lines
This was a good drop, I was feeling it. I'm not feeling Fitty's new stuff at all but this beef he's having with Cam'ron.... I'm on 50's side. Fuck Camron.

Good drop - it was nice to see a text drop come outta that brain of yours... the piece was good shit

Shitted on Cam...word...even though Cam isn't exactly hard to diss...but you pulled it off...props...

"ONE DAY I'MA BE REPPIN G-UNIT AS THE NIGGA FROM THE MIDWEST//
AND WHEN THAT TIME COME YA BETTER ASK CURTIS FOR HIS OLD VEST//"

Was dope...not exactly sure who would want to rep G-Unit, but whatever floats your boat...

Some of it was a bit forced though...and you didn't come flying with punches, most of it was just threats and boasts...still flowed pretty good...you got potential...keep at it...

Stay up...1