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you girls no that you like me To Much And Your Glad-Im-Here..//
When You Say Im Laying Rape Charges Come on Thats a Bad-Idea..//
Wow Having a Dream Of Myself And i Can Feel Some Thoughts-soon..//
You Never Wonted To See Me Again Haha I Bet You WIll In The" Court-Room"..//
Her Mom Stepped In But I Was Perfectly Fine She Was Going In But" Flew-Outta-Mine"..//
What! are you doing with my daughter Sorry you shoulda just asked im better With "two-at-a-time"..
Moved My Zipper Up Fast Before The Father Came I Couldnt help it had to smell her blouse..//
I was A Foot Away From The Door And i Got a Ass Kicking And Literally Kicked From The House..//

haha..That was tight..personal experience?..or jus rap?

Wow Having a Dream Of Myself And i Can Feel Some Thoughts-soon..//
You Never Wonted To See Me Again Haha I Bet You WIll In The" Court-Room"..//
^Fav Lines..
Overall it Was Cool. Multis On Point, Although Some Were Kinda Forced. Flowed Argight, Some Re-Wording And More imagery Would Make This a Lot Better. But it Was Pretty Dope n Funny 2 Read at Some Parts So Word.

lmaoooooo, nice bro, still workin on gettin those multies into tellin a story huh? good shit!! some of the mutlies were pretty forced, dont know if that been said yet, with an accent i suppose there nice n fluent tho
anyways, overall, its a nice drop, keep it up man!

Her Mom Stepped In But I Was Perfectly Fine She Was Going In But" Flew-Outta-Mine"..//
What! are you doing with my daughter Sorry you shoulda just asked im better With "two-at-a-time"..
^^ my fav line kinda funny lol

Wow Having a Dream Of Myself And i Can Feel Some Thoughts-soon..//
You Never Wonted To See Me Again Haha I Bet You WIll In The" Court-Room"..//

^^ i still dnt get this, maybe coz im slow haha

overall, im sure ive seen better from u this wasnt bad it was nice funny and short which i like, but u culda done more with it like make it funnier. keep dropping my fellow aussie! and remember my uni is close to u! im gna stalk u now! ull love it tho so its all good <3

lmfao...it was only a quick drop all mine are quick

hey hey dnt laugh u wanted some feed and i gave it to u! haha <3

wasnt laughin at that i was laughin becuz you threating to stalk me lololol

it was decent lil homie..i was feelin it..i seen u more complex but hey u stayed on topic so nice job keep it up lil homie -1-