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a broken heart

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 10:35 am
by LadySam
i hate you i hate you
all these things i do never a thank u
ur not even worth my tears
u should be the one running with fear
not me, you see
without me your world would not be stable
youd have no food on ur fucking table
i sholda let u starve wen i had the chance
ur a fucking loser eat my fucking ass
uve got me here crying HAPPY NOW?
ruining my future R U PROUD?
i sholda never trusted u
its my fault for loving u
now its too late
my heart is at stake
ur nothing but a fake
is this an afterlife punishment
bad case of reincarnation?
u broke my heart
how culd YOU do that
YOU! how culd YOU!!!
UR NOT MEANT TO
i really hate u!
tell me the truth
did u ever love mee
LEAVE dnt come back
we dnt need u here everythings already wack
still got me crying
part of me is dying
this was meant to be UNCONDITIONAL LOVE
daddy u shoulda wore a glove
i hate u i hate u


http://illestlyrics.com/board/girls-vt4160.html

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 10:39 am
by ~*Blitz*~
Sammity Sam

I know this is a touchy subject and props to you on being able to drop it and open up that part of you for others to read and feed on...

I liked this drop because you werent afraid to let your emotions run wild and you put everything you had into it - I love you kid <3

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 10:40 am
by LadySam
ty sammy<3

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 10:44 am
by fuck haters
i liked the beginin the most overall 8/10

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 10:46 am
by Momeijah
Lol Yah, You've Elevated a Lot Describing Things.. Not Much SHowed in This Piece Tho. Honestly For What it Was And What u intended it 2 Be it Was Dope. Like Emotional n Shit, That Was Present Throughout, it All Flowed Nicely And u Got ur Message Across Very Well Lol. All i Can Say is Keep Up The Good Work And Try 2 Put More Descriptive Similies And imagery into a Drop Like This. ur Whole Approach Made it Easy 2 See What u Meant n Shit But Using imagery Always Makes it More Fun 2 Read :D Lol

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 10:59 am
by SlickMex
I liked it..plain n simple..

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 11:03 am
by LadySam
thanks for the feed boys

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 12:03 pm
by Lawgix
this is a side of ladysam i want to see when she writes.... VERY emotional plain and to the point hun... deep shit great job 9/10 keep up the good work

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 12:04 pm
by *.HarleQuin.*
AMEN..i love u sammie, good job hun

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 1:05 pm
by LadySam
ty lawgix ill try to keep it up and i love u tooo sammy <3

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 5:38 pm
by LadySam
uppin

Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 7:26 am
by urbanhistory
straight to the point for thr subject u writin bout you didn need to have the best structure flow was on point real deep n emotional piece keep doin what u do

Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 2:53 pm
by LadySam
ty <3