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i was going thru the scriptures, found this, i posted it like a loooooooooooooong ass time ago, it aint great but i thought it belonged more in the distilled concepts section, just about me bein stressed cause of someone named hoebitch

turning the page, yearning for days, concerning this cage/
perpetual chains, scars-left from heated arguments burning my face/
the hurt in my brain, is returning to stay/
and destroy my concience, as i deploy this nonsense/
my offset scriptures are godsent/
my sanity is my last bet, but its hooked in hypnosis and the traps set/
hopeless raps get...
corrosive to my self respect, and i cant help regret.../
cant help regret when i fell..for..get/
wanna forget the moments when i was holdin the coldest most soul less/
monster with rose lips/
and kind eyes hiding whats inside its ferocious emotionless hostess...its hopeless/
could have hid my eyes but i chose ta look/
sitting with my lifes story before me, and its so unfamiliar though i wrote tha book/
so i disappear in a confusing mist/ feeling the uselessness/
looking in the mirror like "i donno who this is"/
an abused invisionist/
with suicidal recitals lacking the muse to slit his wrists/

lol i thought it was interesting, so lemme know whatcha think

very nice... love this piece i seen it once before, dont think i left feed "scars-left from heated arguments burning my face" kinda reminds me of something i wrote once haha... anyways good shit man Piece asshole

it was kool man...structure was ehhh..but the lyrics were nice..

I liked this piece, it was worded nicely and straight to the point...

wanna forget the moments when i was holdin the coldest most soul less/
monster with rose lips/

^^^ that line just stuck out to me, lord only knows why lol

Anyway, I enjoyed reading this and you should write more pieces like it just maybe with a happy topic, like bunnies <3

Pretty dope shit, those two lines that were pointed out were also the two that grabbed my attention, most soul less monster with rose lips...haha that's pretty deep...
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"A sexy female is just a bitch in disguise"-Multi