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" Saved by a Soldier "

Posted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 2:35 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
Hes awoken and specifically Givin his Soldiers Orders, to Invade and Conquer Iraq,
Wit Mortars, Mini Missiles & Grenades, he was Trained to Attack and How to ReAct,
Loyal Servant to an UnMarked Division, livin circumstances that of Harsh Conditions,
He's Partly Stricken wit sickness Only thing keeping him alive is the Heart Within Him,
His Mind was Taughten to Accomplish, his missions wit only God as an Accomplice,
To be a soldier you Ought to be ThoughtLess cuz in this trade yuh Coffin is the Office,
Now yuh strapped and Ready for War, Steady the Sword to play out Heavens Remorse,
Machine Guns and Machettes to Force, the Heaviest Gore of the Deadliest Sort,
Dressed for Combat, striking from behind unseen like where are the Rest of the Bombs At,
He says Held at Sadams Shack, he confessed so he slit his throat and That's where it Stopped At,
Got up and Headed to the Destination, steady contemplating of his Entrance of the Penetration,
Loaded his Weapons ready for Detonation, infiltratin the area of the Bio-Chemical Reparations,
Found maps, plans, and blueprints for the placement of an Atom Bomb at the Center of Earth,
The First Beginnin of Birth, of a perfect search to killin humanity, ultimately Endin its Worth,



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Posted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 3:04 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
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Posted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 3:13 pm
by Ambiguous Realm
i liked the story line a bit, few choppy spots but alot of nice lines to make up for it.. not as good as the other one in my opinion but a lil more up to date so it was pretty koo

Posted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 3:24 pm
by Lawgix
i love the story line to this peice... kinda fell off here n there but u got back on the horse with the lines... good shit... very lyrical... put an image in my head of what this guy was seein so good job man!!!

Posted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 3:39 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
thanx yall for the feed, yeah im jus tryin to go a different route in my writtins... wit the tourny it showed me diff style of writin and liked it so i rolled wit it.

big ups for more feed

Posted: Fri Mar 23, 2007 2:36 am
by ~*Blitz*~
I liked this drop - the content stuck with the topic really frikin well and as everyone else said it was very lyrical. Its nice to see something diffrent from you and you should continue to keep writing diffrently from what you normally do b/c you're not bad at it and this piece proves that. Good job Ghosty

Posted: Fri Mar 23, 2007 4:47 am
by Lawgix
well worded there blitz :p

Posted: Fri Mar 23, 2007 5:26 am
by ~*Blitz*~
always =)

Posted: Sat Mar 24, 2007 1:56 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
thanx for the feed again yall

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