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this is really a birthday present to my girl tho.. gonna record this shit and stuff.. mix it up real good.. lol.. but anyway, hoping for some feedback.. bear goin soft.. lol..


I just love the way we tune it like the volume of a stereo
no one can ruin it, so I assume this is the way to go
u heal me when i'm wounded like morpine in my veins
we defeated the stains, U make my sunshine when it rains
found the right combination to my shackles of love
time for celebration when earth turns to paradise above
I'm just amazed by your compound, u're like my everything
the way u make my heart sing, give me that love potion
I know it's real, cause I've never felt this sweet emotion
u make my heart beat like it's bouncin way off radar
remember when I talked to u, I'll never regret that action
cause I discovered something unique, I found perfection
my heart, my longues and an always supportin tongue
during tribulation and celebration i feel your hand
squeezin it while u're guidin me through unknown land
i'm holdin as hard as i can, cause i will never let go no matter what

greater then the greatest, precious like the garden of heaven
i'm kneeling in front of our love, this amazing feeling
it's healing me, puttin a safety net over me like a ceiling
just the way u sparked my glow and ignited it into fire
makes me enquire how u give me this bloomingly desire
i never required much, tried to do somethin with what i had
now it feels like i've got everything, nothin can really go bad
still get the shivers by thinkin of your great personality
cause your heavenly mentality makes me drop a tear or two
the only thing i wonder, is what the fuck i did to deserve u
u make wine outta water amd happiness when there's sadness
feels like i've known u for many years and it aint madness
i've grown with u, cause i've seen something unique in u
a soul behind your eyes with an aura like the virgin mary
a compassion unlike anythin else, but it doesn't scare me
cause baby, you're just the girl i wanna be with..

when u're not here my minds travels to another atmoshpere
u gotta be the most perfect person on this hemisphere
when u told me about your childhood, baby i cried with u
let me help u and turn it into good, I wanna try with u
cause no one can change something that's already happened
but we can rearrange the plan, to live withour this crap and
try to make this right cause that's my number one priority
u've shown great superiority thorugh your mature actions
i felt your attraction so suddenly like it fractioned my eyes
was distractioned by your beauty, it gave me a fuckin knockout
the way u ripped my cock out and handled it with perfection
only the first date, but u gave me one hell of an erection
made my soul ressurect, u found somehing hidden in me
found a respect, admiring how good life can really be
injected me with your love potion, now we're singing together
let's enjoy the sweet emotion longer then forever and ever


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I liked the first 2..wasnt really feelin the last one tho..Good Dro tho..

Well I dont think anyone can call this a bad verse because it definatley came from the heart and that shows. The emotion is there and peeks out nicely. I think some areas kinda dragged on and coulda used some fine tuning but it might fit right when its on audio. It was hella long but a nice read. Some of the areas I questioned but it all still held together nicely. Your girl should be touched, its cool to see the soft side of you boys - I know you all got one under that layer of steel lol...Good work

haha.. aiit.. thanks.. it's actually a very persoal text, not my favourite topic... u'd probably seen it different if u'd known a bit more and stuff.. but thanks for feedback ya'll

uppin