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Quick Lil Somethin (4Bars)
Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 1:32 am
by ~Symbolikull~
My salivas a flammable fluid, my words are the Wick and the Spark,
To Rip you Apart, like a grenade penetratin from the Ribs to the Heart,//
Hitting its Mark, Im like this world! I was born Sick from the Start,
Sit and Read my Lyrics then Hear It, it takes Spirit to Listen to Art,//
Jus In Vision the Sars, striking yuh eyes like lightning wit the Precision of Stars,
And the Distant Isnt to Hard to see that in our future exists a Prison on Mars,//
So Im Switchin my Guard, and you'll find yourself searchin but Missin yuh Cards,
My Position of Bars, will leave yuh senseless wit scars like Christians in Bars,//
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 3:24 am
by ~Symbolikull~
UppIN the Feed
Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 3:41 am
by Street Pharmacist
this was ok lol good multys
VVVV that was hot
So Im Switchin my Guard, and you'll find yourself searchin but Missin yuh Cards,
My Position of Bars, will leave yuh senseless wit scars like Christians in Bars,//
Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 3:43 am
by ~Symbolikull~
thanx man appreciate the feed uppin for more
Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 1:21 am
by ~Symbolikull~
UppIN the FeedBack
Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 3:10 am
by ~*Blitz*~
You should add to this, it could be a nice verse once completed. It was good for the shortness, nice multis as always. I challenge you to write a verse without one multi!
Anyway this is my fav bar
Hitting its Mark, Im like this world! I was born Sick from the Start,
Sit and Read my Lyrics then Hear It, it takes Spirit to Listen to Art,//
Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 3:17 am
by ~Symbolikull~
if i were to write a verse without one multie, i dont think it would look right to me... like i wasnt puttin in my full effort in to it. but i think i may take you up on that challenge.
thanx for the feed Blitz..
UppIN
Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 1:53 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
thanx man, i appreciate dude fo reel... all you guys who left feed i appreciate and you know yall will get it back in return... stay up
UppIN
Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2007 8:19 am
by B-Bear
i owe u one or two.. so here's my feedback..
the first bar was brilliant.. u had some good imagery thorughout the verse.. creative imagery.. liked that.. some nice basic multies, made it all go weell in together.. structure was good.. i feel like readin more man.. basically.. tight drop..
Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2007 9:56 am
by ~Symbolikull~
brilliant!!! i liked that one .....lol
thanx for the feed man
UppIN
Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2007 10:07 pm
by complexity
I thought it sucked! j/k
but I'm dead serious.
Edit: First bar was at least 6/10
Edit Again: No hate or homo!
Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 12:43 am
by ~Symbolikull~
^^^^nice feed j/k
but I AM DEAD SERIOUS
fuckin herpe lips
Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 4:14 pm
by complexity
How much feed can I leave with 4 bars? lol
2. sucked
3. sucked
4. sucked
Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 6:20 pm
by Ambiguous Realm
liked the multis.. and the way u stuck to space for a bit.. the prison on mars bar caught me attention the most
Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 11:56 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
PLEX hatin on me
Thanx Ekoms appreciate the feed man