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in n out of consciousness cant compehend this trance/
is this my last breath or an extended chance ta defend wit hands/

lights n sirens ...i was hit by tyrants/
will my vital signs get silent cuz the beef led ta violence/

eyes flashing.. thoughts of friends and family/
n my girl traumatically weeping over caskets from tragedy/

will i end up in the earth or will i get a life pass/
if its death bury me facedown so you can kiss my ass/

will i live n be given the oppurtunity ta change my ways/
its strange days n bein crooked is a game that pays but finds ya way ta graves /

believe ta the grind were slaves\

will this be the time ta meet the one who made me/
cuz i thought no one could fade me til i saw the nine spraying/

face enemys head on ready fa the lords consequences wit no escape mode/
i hope if i ever make it up there ta them "pearlies" they break me off wit the "gate" code/

but ya know i dont give a fuck keep blastin/
betta connect though cuz if ya miss its ya ass man/

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Yea man..decent drop..seen better but you had some good bars in their..Keep Droppin..SWAT..

thx slick uppin

man This Was Good Ur first Two Bars Were Pritty Ill Keep It Good Shit Peace

appreciate the feed fellas

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the first 4 bars of ya verse was ill!! then u fell off as the verse kept on goin.. a pity, cause if u'd kept the quality from the start, u'd have a great lil verse man.. but why did u fuck the structure up?

will i live n be given the oppurtunity ta change my ways/
its strange days n bein crooked is a game that pays but finds ya way ta graves /

believe ta the grind were slaves\

will this be the time ta meet the one who made me/
cuz i thought no one could fade me til i saw the nine spraying/

don't do that man.. and keep droppin..!!

yeah was tryin like a break in the middle ta tie it together sumthin different

appreciate the feed

[align=center]Yeah it was okay, nuttin to really comment on.....

The flow was okay for the most, a few bars were nearly stretched but it pretty much kept flowin, multies were used well, not too many, just used when needed.

The topic was aight, it witched up alot though but im guessin' thats cos it was quick

in n out of consciousness cant compehend this trance/
is this my last breath or an extended chance ta defend wit hands/

lights n sirens ...i was hit by tyrants/
will my vital signs get silent cuz the beef led ta violence/

^^ Prolly my favoroute bars, keep at it[/align]

started so-so and just went so-so-so-crappy.. leave ur emotions for the poetry cuz its holding ya lyrics back