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i camuflage my ravaging, cause i'm damaging like a savage thing
managing all threaths like i'm carrying a shiny magic ring
my life's a tragic thing, so my music's where my salvage spring
I'm balancing on a tight edge like I gotta make my steps right
my hopes are lit like city lights around the midnight strike
my bareknockle fight's like an endless struggle for me at night
I'm battling realistic nightmares and askin myself if Im alive
cause i never survive the nightmares like my destiny is sealed
pinch my arm in confusion askin when's the time to wake up?
do i have to make up for all my mistakes and harm I've done
got a charmin tongue? i'll cut it off so ya mouth fit the gun
i'l split the sun in two like your longues cause u only need one
the break of dawn is approachin quickly wondern if i'm the chosen one?
do i get to repair my frozen sun and change all my life around
loosen up the knife in the ground like arthur and take the crown and
let my mental revolution flow cause my thoughts are no longer grounded

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umm no hate but imo i wasnt feelin this one flow was off
multies were way forced few lines didnt really rhyme either liked the topic n points you were tryin ta get too
just seen way better from you many times
jus bein honest keep droppin n doin ya thing though

EDIT:aiit.. thanks for feedback tho.. was makin this to a beat, so the flow might be a bit choppy to some..

[align=center]Hmm not bad, as Guy said the flow was choppy and the multies were forced in places but all in all it was a decent drop.

i camuflage my ravaging, cause i'm damaging like a savage thing
managing all threaths like i'm carrying a shiny magic ring
my life's a tragic thing, so my music's where my salvage spring

Your startin 2 lines were promising, but it sorta fell off after that.....

Not bad keep at it[/align]

it sucked.. and that magic ring line was gay...well atleast it matches the title cuz this all fell apart before u even started