Hip Hop Forum

somethin about me
that these ho's keep testing
but little do they know
they faker than a beef in pro wrestling
my flows are expression
my thoughts n my minds never resting
luck? i know what i do
ta tell the truth i dont need that
come through wit a key sacked
wit da seat back in a ski mask
kickin ass like im sea bass
reach back deep
n smack the shit out a weak track
spittin in riddles wit no middle man…
n like my ass was a 15" bumpin
you know my shit will slam
comin quick wit scams ta rip ya man
sterling blades razor sharp equipped ta slit ya fam
like a bow n arrow slicin through bone marrow
I don't gamble.. ga head roll the dice
n leave wit yadome narrow
im like fred smackin dino back in time
stackin c-notes
got more cheese at my finger tips
than ya find in a bag of cheetos
makin ya nose bleed
like altitudes of freezin ski slopes
ta all the chickens talking shit
just keep ya beeks closed//

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razor sharp equipped ta slit ya fam//
like a bow n arrow slicin through bone marrow I
don't gamble.. ga head roll the dice n leave wit ya
dome narrow//


yea this sort of sucked...it was ok..nothing special...ur flow and structure was horrible...the rhyme scheme was ok...the multis were there.but overall this was a 6/10 but im sure u can do better...so hopefully it was just a quick lil dilly

uppin

seen better out of you, looks like you just wrote this piece for something to do and didnt put much thought into it, it was kind of all over the place but its still better then some of the shit ive seen on here so props for that and keep em coming