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You Be The Judge.

I Thought I Could Always Be Good, Nothing Going For Me So I Decided To Rap...//
It Was In The Palm Off My Hand, Clinching A Dream, Then Feel outta my Grasp...//

Ive Always Been My Biggest Fan, Loved My Bars.. I Thought It Was "Sick-Seeing-My-Shit".. //
This Game, You Cant Win Chasin Big Boy Dreams, Should I Quit And " Stick-Being-A-Kid"..? //

This Isnt A Faze, Im Chasing A Dream, And It Feels Like Im Not Even Gettin-Close..
I Wanna Be Free, Like Im Selling Clothes, Should I Just Stop, im serious.. Not Telling-Jokes..//

Maybe This Could Be The Last Chapter, Like The Back Of A Book..//
Im Not Sure About The Feedback, i dont Think Ill Be Back To Look .. //

Losing My Passion. Like My Carrer Im Not Sure Iff Im Glad-It-Began...//
....But It Feels Like I Gotta Give up And Throw Away The Pad-And-The-Pen..//

Wars Happen Every Year, But Im Going Through One Every Day Raps Got Me Mentally Sour..
Maybe This Music Doesnt Fit Me Anymore? Cause Im Not Having, Fun It Feels Like A Chour....


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Lol Dude 1st Of All Lmfao @ Thinkin About Quittin Already u Just Turned 13, Accomplish Some Shit Before Calling it a Day Like Winning a Couple Tourneys n Shit.

it Was Ok, Some Choppy Flow And Forced Multis, u Did Get ur Point Across But Drop The Emo Shit Dude Haha Rap is Fun And it Helps ur Schoolwork.

this was bette than what youve been doing lately. but i agree ur only 13 if you keep at it you'll get heaps better. keep it up mate =)

yeah its all good.
Don't quit. I thought of quitting to damn, but now im sure im staying with rap. And yeah, sometimes i wish i could be a kid again, that line got me right der lol.

Should I Quit And " Stick-Being-A-Kid"..?

And chea, u can be a kid, be a kid in rap =D

But don't stop if this is ure dream lol

When rap becomes a chore I think its time for a break...not to quit. If its something you love to do then whats the point in giving it up? Everyone gets burnt out at one time or another and when that happens you just need to give it up for a couple weeks and focus on something else until you feel like you wanna write again. Don quit, you have alot of potential and have elevated a shit load...and its something you enjoy doing.

This piece definatley got its point across, I didnt like the way some of the bars were worded...seems like they were forced a bit and you were just trying to rhyme the words and not really giving a shit about what it came out like. You stayed on topic and some of it was alright, but dont give it up!