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I can deprive you of your life, deny you the write to speak what you like
When I write, rhymes, the only thing that's keeping my mind right
At times I thought I would die trying to hold a Mic I'm the type
That loads guns and pulls hammers, plus my rhyme style's nice
Like I know manners, you coming at me hard, but you'll cause no damage
I only take head shots like photographers that hold cameras
Catch me with a magazine, but I prefer to stay with the candids
Rollin with a mean girl like Rachel McAdams, I stay with the baddest
Bitches you neva met in ya life, most these MC's stay as sharp
As the wrong edge of a knife, holding on to they dicks instead of a Mic
Trying to fuck with bitches that will give em head if they trifled
Fuck with my ice I'll leave your head with a price, while U sleep
My crew will creep and leave you dead in the night, that's my advice
My whole click will leave you flipped, plus you hand me a pistol, kid
I'll watch it bust, and leave more motherfuckas dead than Bishop did
Leave you speaking your shit twisted like Autistic kids, my homies
Will find you in the streets and strip your bitch, touchin' mad breasts
Maybe get your address and hit your crib, listen I'm not the kid to be seein
If an AK's what I'm keeping, then I'm quick to leave your brains leaking
On the streets stinkin', especially if he the whack type, he get the gat
Dawg I'm still staying trifled, my raps is more addictive than crack pipes
I keeps it raw, plus I stay strapped like a Victoria's Secret's Braw
I'm the illest thang you ever saw, my rhymes is hard I don't dare stutter
But beware of Gutta, He roll with brothas who will make you die like HAIR COLOR
I'm quick to bang it on you like Shaq do to a hoop, like Papoose do to a booth
My life is full of lies, that's why I think im do for the truth, looking for additions
That's new to the coup, Most MC's is whack, they the type I beat up in School Halls
Matter fact I do recall, most these “MC'sâ€

feedback any one???

kinda sloppy here and there.. fell off alot of times and a few nice multis in some areas.. mostly bad ones..kinda jumping around so im not sure wat's really being said..couple names mentioned although didn't do much of an effect with it..overall... i think i like the other one u posted a lil more

thats decent man

i liked it, like Evo said it had some highs and low but all and all the flow was pretty nice and clean. Decent imagery and some aite metas and such. Keep at it man

Where u been man ? Anyway this was good but not ur best. Still bringing the erratic rhymescheme changes and inners I always expect from u, but there was less imagery in this than u usually have. Still, good shit.

Some lines were decent...as previously stated
I mean there were times like OH SHIT HE'S ABOUT TO GO IN
but no...you didn't you trailed off with another rhyme
sometimes it worked sometimes it didn't, but it still worked
it's confusing but at the same time it was somewhat likable
maybe it was the idea you delivered along with it, the whole
fucking bad bitches...it was done, but you brought it back
you made it seem cool to say all that shit, which is cool
but at the same time it makes me think your stuck in a old school frame
I don't know, either way cool piece brah...

I agree with both the guys above me. I liked some concepts with this but sometimes the flow feel off and it seemed like I was hearing shit Ive heard before, which kinda killed the originality for me. Other than that, maybe switch it up with a little more wordplay.

Was all tight till this part ;

"I keeps it raw, plus I stay strapped like a Victoria's Secret's Braw
I'm the illest thang you ever saw, my rhymes is hard I don't dare stutter
But beware of Gutta, He roll with brothas who will make you die like HAIR COLOR"

Don't know about tha victoria's secret bra line....noone dares to stutter, it jus happens lol....and tha last line makes it sound like you roll wit hairdressers...but this ryme flows really well, so keep on postin bro...