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I want the world to be mine like Nas, while I'm sitting designing bars//
I come hard, whether hustling in the streets or ridin in the flyest cars//
On beats, I'm know to murder them man, with punches like Robert Duran//
Known to spit a verse if I can, with a tight grip on the Mic till it burns in my hand//
A lot of MC's talkin this and that, wear they caps straight till I flip em back//
Matter of fact they be spittin it whack, I think they should be quitting in rap//
Evidently it seems that I'm out for dead fuckin presidents to represent me//
Read the words I'm writin and you'll swear to GOD heaven sent me//
Dealin with life's obstacles, plus I'm blowin O's of smoke on top of those//
The way the Vodka goes, it'll quickly have me fallin down like Dominoes//
I call fakes like I see them, they sayin “Gutta you gassedâ€

I want the world to be mine like Nas, while I'm sitting designing bars//
I come hard, whether hustling in the streets or ridin in the flyest cars//

^^thought this was a rather weak opener, kinda sketchy^^

On beats, I'm know to murder them man, with punches like Robert Duran//
Known to spit a verse if I can, with a tight grip on the Mic till it burns in my hand//

^^kinda recycled but tight^^

A lot of MC's talkin this and that, wear they caps straight till I flip em back//
Matter of fact they be spittin it whack, I think they should be quitting in rap//

^^should be **flippin em back** to match syllabols^^

Evidently it seems that I'm out for dead fuckin presidents to represent me//
Read the words I'm writin and you'll swear to GOD heaven sent me//

^^could of been re-worded to be made better, but solid^^

Dealin with life's obstacles, plus I'm blowin O's of smoke on top of those//
The way the Vodka goes, it'll quickly have me fallin down like Dominoes//

^^didnt really get the first line, second was aight tho^^

I call fakes like I see them, they sayin “Gutta you gassedâ€

yo thanks ghost i wrote this pretty quick so it wadnt too great but thanks for the feed dawg

it's a good drop.. but boring in some parts..


A lot of MC's talkin this and that, wear they caps straight till I flip em back//
Matter of fact they be spittin it whack, I think they should be quitting in rap//

I'm quick to scope the fakes, hit them with rhymes hard as a Tyson Punch//
I eat ya rhymes for lunch, drive you insane and leave your mind in such//

try to avoid writin lines like that, cause we've heard it all before.. that's why it's boring.. other then that it's a decent drop, no doubt.. like the wordplay u had goin, and some multies mixed up in it.. u're elevating and experimenting.. keep on goin..

fav bars

I call fakes like I see them, they sayin “Gutta you gassedâ€

thanks for the feed man. muchly appreciated

Well Well Well..

Ill state My Fav Bars.

On beats, I'm know to murder them man, with punches like Robert Duran//
Known to spit a verse if I can, with a tight grip on the Mic till it burns in my hand//
A lot of MC's talkin this and that, wear they caps straight till I flip em back//
Matter of fact they be spittin it whack, I think they should be quitting in rap//

I Thought That Was Pretty Ill, When u Rap Alot Of words Isnt That Grime?.

Flow Was Pretty Good It Was A Solid Drop All Over, Good Work.

^^^^^^ thanx for the feed. grime?

Nice drop. The opening and closing bars were kinda played but i thought the middle was dope


Evidently it seems that I'm out for dead fuckin presidents to represent me//
Read the words I'm writin and you'll swear to GOD heaven sent me//
Dealin with life's obstacles, plus I'm blowin O's of smoke on top of those//
The way the Vodka goes, it'll quickly have me fallin down like Dominoes//
I call fakes like I see them, they sayin “Gutta you gassedâ€

thanks alot man^^^^^