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cannabis is my only "addiction",it takes the pain "away"//
ill still do it after "conviction",it gets me my "pay"//

when i "torch i"t,its like a ray of light from the "heavens"//
i never "scorch it",coz its been wit me since i was "seven"//

its my only "friend",the only one i would ever "need"//
it helps me "blend",its the cure for my only "greed"//

when i need money i sell them "birds",sumtimes a whole "flock"//
so think its funny coz they dont belive my "words",but i sell on my "block"//

my salary varys from "day to day" never a steady "rate"//
gotta live wit theses "pay to pay" always ready at "8"//

i wake up wit the "birds" and make people sleep wit the "fishes"//
coz im on west and "third" and people act like little "bitches"//

and they try to rip my "off",they try to take away my "money"//
ill leave u sleepin in a "trough", coz fuckin wit my job aint "funny"//

with a little help from Viral in the 1st verse

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/patie ... t5741.html

whoa i just relized that i put up the wrong version of it heres the better one

cannabis my addiction, it takes my pain away/
puffin after conviction, i always make pay//

i "torch it",like a ray of light from the "heavens"//
never "scorch it",coz weve been down since "seven"*//

my only "friend",the only one i "need"//
we must always"blend",the cure of my"greed"//

i sell them "birds",sumtimes a whole "flock"//
some dont belive my "words",but i sell on every "block"//

my salary varys from "day to day", never a "steady rate"//
gotta live wit this "pay to pay" always "ready at 8"//

wake up wit the "birds" and make people sleep wit the "fishes"//
coz im on west and "third" and people acting like little "bitches"//

they try to rip me "off",tryin to run away wit my "money"//
left them sleepin in a "trough", coz fuckin wit my job aint "funny"//

doesnt look like her helped you out too much, but he isnt one to give advice on writtens though, hes more on the audio tip. you need to make your rhymes a lil more complex and add more content to your subjects...

well he only told me to make them shorter and to the point he only helped on the 1st bar hes gonna help me out wit the rest when he gets back on AIM but what do u think of it did i elevate at all

word n all the " " isnt necessary at that level

but better than some of ya other shit

kinda better """"keep climbin that hill""""

yea i forgot to that those off (" ") thankx ghost i will

ps
how come when big p elevates he gets pts given to him but when i get better i just get a pat on the back and a good job bud? lol shits weak lol

for some odd reason the ppl on the site pitties him, dont feel bad be proud they aint buddy buddy to you in your face then shittin on you and laughin at you behind yuh back, at least were upfront wit you....

yeahhh tru well how can i get ppl to give me sum pts?like how would i impress sum1 good enough to give sum up

plain and simple, write some ill shit wit crazed blazin pencils

crazed blazin pencils?wtf lol

jus boredom idiot

ahhh gotcha

AHHHHHHH fuckers i put up the wrong version of tha song i edited it and out the verse that was suppose to be there

cmon ppl feed back please