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Ladysam
RH1NO

i feel like time was designed-by-hate,
my grind was on time but love, it was blind-n-late
the fact that the signs were examined in my mind-too-Late,
would by chance be the factor of decided-fate
itll take nothin more than the cash-ta-blind-us,
bulidin a wrath-inside-us
our dicks sometimes take us down the wrong path-n-blind-us,
but cats aint quick ta pass-up-fast-vagina
like i been scarred n sent straight ta hell,
worse than the horror in amity-ville its a calamity-still,
but i believe that everyhting happens for a reason, its humanity's-will
no idea why we were happy the bliss-was-dark,
cant start over.. the ignitions missin offin the piston-spark
tryin ta stay slick like 50 but i missed-my-mark,
firin on all cylinders then it just ripped-my-heart
locked in a prison with thick bars rippin my grip-apart
brush strokes on a canvas jottin down twisted-art
gave up didnt know what diligence-was
never meant ta be like an illegitimate-love


welcome to my heartbreak hotel, the calamity caused by my broken heart
this flower will never foretell, whether my heart will be ripped apart.
he loves me he loves me not, i was foolish enough to give him my trust
my heart is starting to rust,to me it was love to him it was pure lust
my emotions are running wild, give me a knife, best belive ill stab you
chop you up and sell you for dinner, making sure your undervalued
ill provide you with nightmares you'll wake up screaming my name
dont flatter yourself you were never distinctive your all just the same
you can obliterate my heart but my soul is still intact
my eyes never green with envy that chicks just a hoe on your sack
the exit sign to my life is to your right so please be in motion
the words lies and deception were never in the manual to devotion
liquid in the form of crystals running down the sides of my face
take your hands off me dont wipe my tears youve done enough leave this place
true love is eight letters but then again so is bullshit
im leaving you shut the door behind you i cant believe i was so foolish.

that was great...
my favorite line of LadySams was...

"true love is eight letters but then again so is bullshit
im leaving you shut the door behind you i cant believe i was so foolish."

And Rhinos verse was just hott line after hott line...

good shit...

word apprecaite the feed homie

uppin

da guy should of used this verse the multie tourny.... much better

Rhino you had a solid verse with sick multis
our dicks sometimes take us down the wrong path-n-blind-us,
but cats aint quick ta pass-up-fast-vagina
So True^

LadySam your always improving with every drop..i really liked this one from you..
Good emotion on the written..

uppin feed

nice collab keep it upp

LadySam's like the monster of love songs up in here.. lol..

but u're improving ms aussie.. although i'd like to see some lines reworded to make a much bigger impact on your message.. but u got some nice imagery in your piece, flow and structure's gettin better.. keep it up!

Example:
liquid in the form of crystals running down the sides of my face


Rhino, U got some ill multies in this piece, but missing a more consistent structure.. think i've mentioned that before.. cause ur flow sounded a lil choppy in a few places, but apart from that, it was def a good verse man... overall, a nice collab peeps..

haha monster of love songs. ill take it in a positive way lol thanks for the feed mate

Good drop. Best iv seen from you LadySam. Nice multis Rhino 8/10

ta

LadySam wrote:haha monster of love songs. ill take it in a positive way lol thanks for the feed mate

It was meant in a positive way

too ugly freaks bumping uglys how ironic

not bad, it was an entertaining read

i liked the multies rh1no yer gettin pretty sick with it :

itll take nothin more than the cash-ta-blind-us,
bulidin a wrath-inside-us
our dicks sometimes take us down the wrong path-n-blind-us,
but cats aint quick ta pass-up-fast-vagina

^^ haha that was dope

sam yer gettin better, the closing bar was excellent, n i like the bigger words your usin, n still workin on fittin the multies in


good job guys

appreciate the feed homie