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Both Of You Will Be Writing On - Teenage runaway
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Multis-
Rhyming/Rhyme Scheme-
Creativity-
Structure-
Vocab-

how is this an elimination match????

oopsie i copied and pasted tha on accident

Yah. I think it was quite obvious.

What defines the projects? the odds are strict, the signs of progress
lead to nowhere, how many times the glock hits, blinds ur conscience
what caused me to go there, I cant find the logic, now Im stuck on the strip
Ive had enough of this shit, Im suffering everyday ducking the clips
on my way to work; seeing shades of gray, letting my life just fade away
my wages are low, im basically broke, so I sell drugs to raise my pay
its gotta to be safe to say, Im a waste of life, I rancorously face the day
a teenager that chased the light n ran away,now I have no place to stay
in my life, I gotta say, dropping out of school, was probably the highlight
now Im in the twilight, nothing good is going to happen, so why write?
the hood is spread with tragic scenes, and you hafta to have the green
so the average scheme, involves guns, now can you imagine me
trying to "run again"?, like recycling plants, everyones unloading magazines
some for fun, its basically gun for gun, until a faggot screams
take it from a bum; I shouldnt of run, now Im facing my worst fears
I want my parents to search here, as Im shedding my first tears

This happenin?

I don't want him Dq'd, we will wait until he returns and figure he has a good excuse.

ayo my bad, i hit a slump in funds and lost my comcast for a while but its back k up and runnin now, so heres my verse that i have had done since the second day after this was set up..

my bad guys, my apologies:

It was a Summer Day, and wit One Mistake, made a 16 yr old little man became a Run Away,
Couldn't stand his Mothers Hate, since his Father broke out the same way the Rubber Breaks,//
Learned from his brother to Act Shady, an accident child born thru scorn as a Crack Baby,
Fingers itchin to push a Macks Safety, addicted to something he aint never tried so his Hands Shaky,//
Hes slippin ona Mission to Eat, never Lived in the Streets, no common sense or Tricks up his Sleeves,
Cant walk on his own like Christopher Reeves, wit no Pitchers to Drink hes getting Sick from the Heat,//
Its High Noon, when his bad mood hits him like a Typhoon, spots a dude in White Shoes and a Nice Suit,
The Hype Soon, takes over his Life Thru, the hunger and the pain, his stomach is sayin “lets go Buy Foodâ€

i think this should be finished

multis:complexity
rhyming/rhyme scheme:complexity
creativity:ghost
structure:ghost
vocab:complexity

overall:complexity

multis: Plex
rhyming/rhyme scheme: Plex
creativity: Ghost
structure:Plex
vocab:Plex..

Vote - Plex... But Yo.. U Should Be a Lil More Realistic Plex.

. Im stuck on the strip
Ive had enough of this shit, Im suffering everyday ducking the clips
on my way to work; seeing shades of gray, letting my life just fade away
my wages are low, im basically broke, so I sell drugs to raise my pay

Multis- had to go wit plex on this one.
Rhyming/Rhyme Scheme- Plex
Creativity- Plex, He was more on topic and he had harder hitting lines on the topic.
Structure- Ghost, it might have been long but you made it really smooth mang
Vocab- Ghost

Overall is Complexity.

Nice battle