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Ive Lost Track
Posted: Sat Jul 28, 2007 5:28 am
by Viral
Ive Lost Track of these times, wit a cracked back i squeeze rhymes, left attached to my mind, i cant stack all deez lines, the phone quacks all da time....let me have some space to myself n put deez crimes on da shelf...im tired of havin to stay low, so wired mappin the scape hole, i wont be a scape goat...u dont make it out on time have a nice day yo...we did the odd job but u left evidence, u got questioned, i took off like a jet , i wont succumb to cuffs doubled up n stuffed in a cage, im sucked into rage like a drunk dats on stage i shoulda went in after n started to punch in ya face....but i didnt...cuz ur better off in jail ne ways....u made out wit half of wat we could have, dont laugh n say lets go back....ive ignored you, n told potatoes we'll do it on our own...n wit dat tone dat ur usin ur askin for bruisins, but im better than that....cuz all in all...ur the only one losin....
ummm...dis isnt supposed to be somethin special...jst gettin some shit off my mind....leave feedback if you want
Posted: Sat Jul 28, 2007 1:20 pm
by Momeijah
Dope Rhymescheme, Made it Flow Well. ur Style is Pretty Different But i Like it, Like in This Line Here;
im sucked into rage like a drunk dats on stage
^^ Puttin 'Drunk That's On Stage' into a Line Like That Ain't Easy Lol So Yeah i Was Feelin The Flow n Multis, Kinda All Summed Up at The End, Keep Droppin.
Posted: Sat Jul 28, 2007 2:33 pm
by complexity
Guess whose back with a brand new quack, I mean rap.
Pretty nice drop fellow. It's pretty difficult to tell a story like this with rhymes and you pulled it off pretty good. It's a little hard to relate though. We have to kinda make our own assumptions. Seems like a fucked up situation though and a lot of thoughts to put into a small written.
Overall the flow, multis, transitions were pretty solid.
The feedback, I would give is try to communicate the situation a little more fluidly next time, but overall good job.
Posted: Sat Jul 28, 2007 4:11 pm
by Viral
i appreciate the feedback from yall...its good to see u 2 actually pay attention to wat people drop...i got 3 tracks in da work right now dey should be out by da end of august so keep on a watch
Tom-ass...next time...ill make sure to spread it like mustard!!!
Posted: Sun Jul 29, 2007 9:48 am
by MesaR
I Thought This Was Alright, Wouldnt Call It A " Dope Drop "
The Flow Through Me Off At The Start, But It Caught On When I Looked Through The Whole Thing
The Felling In The Drop Was Pretty Good, There Must Be Things Going On?
I Thought This Drop Was A Little Rushed, And Some Rewording Would Have Made It Better..
Posted: Sun Jul 29, 2007 9:57 pm
by Viral
SequencE wrote:I Thought This Was Alright, Wouldnt Call It A " Dope Drop "
The Flow Through Me Off At The Start, But It Caught On When I Looked Through The Whole Thing
The Felling In The Drop Was Pretty Good, There Must Be Things Going On?
I Thought This Drop Was A Little Rushed, And Some Rewording Would Have Made It Better..
many many mannny things!...at this moment...Hydro Morphone and alcohol.....appreciate the feed mayne...ummm...if possible...anyone else to leave feed ill pay the favor back within the next 2 or 3 days...