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there's no cure for wat i have, now this disease has returned,
a mental setback in life n a thesis to learn,
stunned for a moment as i freeze in concern,
n then it's realized, so i set the pieces to burn,
but these lyrics keep comin as the rhythm's restored
i spit n see more, n my own mind is givin me war,
tryin not to repeat, but every rhyme that's thought up..i've written before,
so i drop to my feet, this music's rippin a sore till im suffocated with words,
its enough to hate it with verbs, so fucked up this stuff's related to herbs,
insane from the battles, it's obvious that rap's desecrated my birth,
feelin pain, like someone took my heart n pressed a blade till it hurt,
until finally i've given up n become less afraid of the earth,
but even then i keep spittin to these beats packed with snare drums,
increasing the momentum like i'm on a track, with flare guns,
eliminatin opponents, from the fact i spare none,


and wat....



in the end i'm back to square one.

Hmm...

I liked it.

I think, I get where you were going with the topic.

Great ending.

Keep writing man.

8/10 on the drop.

u Didn't Link ur Multis, Don't Expect Any Of These idiots To Be impressed, They Don't Understand Shit Lol.

EDIT: I liked the last part of your verse..

"so i drop to my feet, this music's rippin a sore till im suffocated with words,
its enough to hate it with verbs, so fucked up this stuff's related to herbs,
insane from the battles, it's obvious that rap's desecrated my birth,
feelin pain, like someone took my heart n pressed a blade till it hurt,
until finally i've given up n become less afraid of the earth,
but even then i keep spittin to these beats packed with snare drums,
increasing the momentum like i'm on a track, with flare guns,
eliminatin opponents, from the fact i spare none,
and wat....
in the end i'm back to square one"

That part..lol.. anyway, u've always been good with multies man.. i like your lil writtens man, but the structure is horrible.. but as long as i've seen u drop, u've never really had a structure.. the flow improved grealty in the part i qouted above.. and the ending was simple, but still very good.. i gotta say i liked it.. a lil deeper then u used to write.. keep writin man..

well i've always said fuck the structure in rap lol, its not something i focus on i just write to how its easier for myself to read and understand

its been a while since i've actually written n e thing so i figure i'd do something quick like that.. i didn't link the multis becuz ever since i did alot of u start doing it to like its a necessity and it isn't... it became a bad habit of mine so i'm now trying to avoid it,

wat i'm basically saying in this verse is that no matter how many times i get tired of battling and rapping i have an urge to always come back

the title should have explained it... i avoided the forced lines and bs like i use to with those multi packed verses i use to do

i liked it...i do see the basicness of it compared to most of ur other drops n wat not...good to see u back...get at me on MSN fucker...keep in touch wit ur cuzzzzz

Was nice..Like how you closed it..
pretty deep also..Good to see you back..
Would leave better feed when not so tired..