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this lil piece is similiar 2 the song 'here we go again' by dmx kinda..but juz read it n leave some feed

man it wasnt even about the supply of drugs
but that day u had to deny the hugs?
as i felt it in the air,and lied 2 the judge
looked the otha way when u were buyin the slugs
stayed on the rap tip,just fryin some thugs
U FEEL THIS KNOT OF ANGER?im un-tie'n the grudge
but all the respect u had,man u fuckin lost that
dont expect it to be tossed back when we cross paths
so when u look in my eye, i hope u feel the consequence
of turnin on me, and tryna develop a real fight against
this issue im proposin,but its 2 late bro my golden
heart turned black,soul disappeared and flow iz frozen

few bars bout how this kid back stabbed me not 2 long ago

Multis were decent.

I didn't get into the flow.

You had some very creative lines though. The self titled line was probably one of the best, I have seen from you. Yet alone on the site for a while. You need to use more wordplay like that. A lot MORE.

The story was cool.

"man it wasnt even about the supply of drugs
but that day u had to deny the hugs?
as i felt it in the air,and lied 2 the judge
looked the otha way when u were buyin the slugs "

I hated them lines. I wanted to mutilate them out of the story.