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this is my part 2 a collab i did with this kid called Graphix..we talked about how were the under dogs 'trapped in'a frame' or picture so 2 speak and tryna get recignition..peep it..


im stuck behind this glass,all i can seem to find is the past
as i get memories tryna remind my ass that i cant be kind and laugh
cuz my pride is broken my soul has died unspoken,im livin in'a frame
people pass by,take a ride as their approachin and try givin me a name
in their eyes im just worthless,but to me my heart is a master piece
that still shines even after the laughters deceased,but im after these
few things, just some rec-igniton without havin ta have my necklace glissen
yall think im just wreckless bitchin,but seriously check this and listen
were framed,graphik and tramatik,almost reached fame tryna grab it with static
but we fuckin had it with the addicts,there stars all graphic and spastic

It was alright. I'm not going to front.

I couldn't really get into the whole concept. Similar to our collab, although I did come up with the topic. Lol.

To be completely honest, I might not like the concept because of how you executed it.

I love the fact that you keep dropping pieces and trying different things, but I'm going to tell you when I don't think they are working.

I like the fact that you put your own style on all your drops.

The rhymes were fine. Though, I do have to contend a different perspective then anything anyone else has said to you probably. Just because a line is deep doesn't make it interesting.

I don't know? Think about it.

This wasn't horrible or anything. I'm just trying to give you good feedback to work off.

word..bout time some honest feedback is left..not sayin anybody else's isnt..but thanks plex..and yea i kno exactly what u mean man..and lemme kno when ur done with ur verse for our stuff..i kno u busy n all which is str8..but thanks 4 the feed man..apperciate it..uppin

Wasn't too bad bro.
Wasn't the best work I've seen outta you.
But not bad either.
I'd give it a 6 1/2 outta 10

I dunno...maybe cuz the topics been touched alot of times before...I dunno. Hard to say. It just doesn't strike me and leave me in awe...ya know!? But topical wise...it stood to it and was still a good drop.

i agree stayed on topic well

but it was missin something maybe cuz it was meant as a collab

the other verse may have helped idk

but it was good flowed well stayed on point

nice